Into the setting sun

As life draws to a close

My journey now is near it's end
and I have but few regrets,
I'll take his hand when offered up
as on my life the sun it sets.
We'll walk to where the sky meets sea
long shadows in our wake,
memories of good times had
in each footprint that I make.
Then slowly as the years they pass
as the tides of time break land,
these memories will fade, be gone
as will my footprints in the sand.

Author's Note

Just a quickly written something :)I
Needs a bit of tweaking

Reviews

[Patricia]

I love it, no tweeking! I think we all have written something like this, I know I have although mine was in rhyme. that was like ten years ago. wow time flies. well done

[Gee]

The latest of thank yous Patricia.
Hope you are well

[Patricia]

Thanks Gee and doing well, thank you

[Deedee]

I just adore poems that instantly place an image in your mind you can invisualise each moment nice to meet you and an honour to read a wonderful example of rhyming poetry

[Gee]

Thank You Deedee

[VJWild]

Wow for writing that quickly it’s pretty damn good! You have a knack for the rhymes and it WORKS so nicely :)

[Gee]

Cheers. When landing here in 2014 I wrote nowt but rhyme, not so much nowadays.
Glad you approve and thank you

[Kastor homes]

its such a comforting thought, that when our time is up that some divine or superior being simply takes our hand and walks us down the beach. although our footsteps will in time erode and disappear we cant discount those that we love, influenced and taught wont find them in our wake to follow.

This truly is a great write Gee. I enjoyed it greatly.

[Gee]

Cheers Kastor, glad you found this enjoyable

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to make peace with life. I did, took a long time. I learn. I am suppose to be where I am. Hello dear friend. Our poetry changes with time. I loved the poem and thank you for sharing the outstanding words and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Gee]

Thank you for your visit and kind words

[Coyote Poetry]

Hello my good friend and you are welcome.

[Fran Marie]

you created a lovely
image of crossing
over; death is not
an easy thing to
express, yet you
describe its passage
s o beautifully in
poetic verse; nice work

[Gee]

Hi Fran Marie, thank you.
Hope you are well

[Andrew Nelson Stewart]

"It is not death that a man should fear, but he should fear never beginning to live." Marcus Aurelius said once. Your poem goes in various directions feeling the tides of time and excellent metaphors which really serves the poem well. I like the mention of "footprints" the very idea of our existence being wiped as if you were never here nor will you remember. It's a scary thought and In the line "My journey now is near it's end
and I have but few regrets,
I'll take his hand when offered up
as on my life the sun it sets.
We'll walk to where the sky meets sea
long shadows in our wake." The exploration of diving in deep of what you fear as the long-dulling shadows follow you. Reflecting back while facing the end but it's just the beginning of something new. Keep writing I've certainly enjoyed this piece. Sincerely your friend in writing and life :)

[Gee]

Thank you kindly for a great review, tis much appreciated.

[Tania Mo]

The only blissfuly ended journey is on faith.We have to believe in something as we end it.The footprints in sand matter little to us after we're gone for we are gone . Nicely penned Gee.

[Gee]

Thank you Tania Mo

[John the Baptist]

In this material space, change is the only certainty. That is why we must seek that within us which never changes.

[Gee]

Thank you for reading JTB

[Davidgeo]

Living is a type of erosion within time. Everything within time erodes. In several hundred million years even the footprints we left on the moon will erode. Erosion is kind of how we keep time... they might be the same things at the end of the day. (if nothing eroded time wouldn't mean that much)

[Gee]

Morning Dave, thanks for having a read and commenting.
Hope all.is well with you