Survival Of The Sharpest

The mundane life of a dart (or me...?).

-Whoosh-
-Thud-
-Pluck-

-Whoosh-
-Thud-
-Pluck-

My body free,
I move with ease.
I'm free
I'm FREE
I'M -Thud-
My life to flash before me,
Would cause dizziness throughout.
Flash.. Of nothing?
Me - with no point -
A pointless existence indeed.
I see the same things
Day through.
Hear the same sounds
Night long.
All I do is
-Thud-

My journey ends.
I'm on the board.

My head shakes, as per,
When -Pluck-
I'm jolted from my cushion.
Awoken into a realm
Where others are in control.
Passed from person to person.
No connections ever made.

Until -Whoosh-
I'm free.
But -Thud-

My journey ends.
I'm getting bored.

Reviews

[Sean R. Ewing]

Hey giz, weel done, really enjoyed this one. I think we all feel like this at times (u know my predicament at teh moment lol)

Great metaphors used - "I�m jolted from my cushion" - I really enjoyed this one cuz it can show how we are always taken away from our comfort zone.

Things will get better.

xxx

[Gary H]

Cool write. Love it when you throw new ideas around. Thats what the WC is all about. All I can say is Bullseye!

[Crazy Cat Man]

haha ha I love this piece especially the ending.....

My journey ends.
I�m getting bored.

:) you're very clever

[Barry Simiana]

i imagine that it's the thoughts of a clever pet as it looks at it's life. a pet cat that does tricks and wonders why, or a well trained budgie that wants to escape. or perhaps it's a person, used to performing for the world and wondering what if...?
well constructed, especially the breaks taht signifiy movement. they don't inturude into the flow, rather, they enhance the experience.
great work.

[Bubo]

Great metaphors........comparisons to a dart bring thrown and handled
as we often are through life..............loved the

-Whoosh-
-Thud-
-Pluck-

Making it a real feeling and imagary wonderful.

[Cdnsurfer]

I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Clever metaphor for life's unpredictability and fleeting moments of freedom/life. I do think you're starting to hit your rhythm with prose poetry. Well done. Rob

[Peter Truth]

A nice little piece, with good imagery. "Where others are in control, passed from person to person". There are so many ways to read into that line from a metaphorical view. Good write!