Killing Jar

the only way around it

is to seal myself inside the killing jar --

cotton ball soaked in ether and mislaid words,

until my worried wings go quiet and my eyes

     my ocean eyes     heavy-lidded, see for the first time

 

because I can find them in that place,

(where after meets before) the poems that have sank

like lockless keys to the bottom of my brain,

stitched too tightly these days to just let go

 

when I transform,

my pigments will be more dynamic,

and my lines will cut sharp as scalpel blades

through the tender flesh of this life until it cracks,

     fractures like an eggshell     releasing the sun

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

Eager for demise to welcome renewal - a difficult, necessary, beautiful transition...
Wonderful metaphor and unique imagery, Sarah. This is a great piece.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You always seem to really "get me", Rita...for that I feel priveledged. Thank you!

[MsJewel]

I love the imagery and your use of metaphor in this outstanding poem Sarah. You write with such depth, such meaning. I admire your style...it makes me want to be a better writer.

:) Julie

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You humble me...I want to be a better writer! Thank you so much...made my night :)

[Anand Sehgal]

I am also a Big fan of Sarah. She is a Benchmark

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Too kind...I truly appreciate you guys. I shall go to bed happy tonight :)

[Ees]

Nicely done. Interesting play between death and transformation. The middle stanza feels right, my favorite part, though the ending was a nice twist of a surprise too.
Great job!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you, my friend.

[Robert Strzalko]

Interesting use of imagery.

[Horizon K.]

... releasing the sun ...
wow... I feel as if this is a place I have been, written of in my own poetry, where in the death of dreams and loves, you find a place of silence, where you can reflect and realize, and then when you are finally ready, let go, let your heart break and leave nothing... only with that release can you transform and be free... gorgeous, Sarah...

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much, my friend, for seeing the beauty in this one.

[Mark]

A phoenix story? or caterpillar maybe? A phoenix caterpillar-butterfly!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Perhaps... :) I like your interpretation...makes me want to watch Alice in Wonderland :)

[Einstein Noodle]

this is one to savor. re-reading improves my experience. love the title and its thread throughout the entire poem. the aha moment in the first verse is unique and a pleasant surprise for me. the labor of birth in the second and the chrysalis in the third ... enjoyed this much...
E.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I'm glad you took time with this one...it was an odd write, but an emotional one for me.

[Ken Simm.]

This is a wish for something else besides the words that produce it. It is almost a contradiction in terms in that it finds the words you seem so desperately to be seeking. And it finds them in the most surprising and beautiful ways. A fine, impressive and elegant use of metaphor

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much...I knew it was odd when I wrote it, but some things just need to be written, you know?

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

I enjoyed your poem to its depth and I dont think there is anything wrong or the poem does something different. I can say perhaps one of your poems which will be different but might become one of your favourite in time to come. Sometimes we wonder ; I can't imagine you wrote these ones and now this one......I think you do great job as always....Atleast you are already published author and I dream of that every single minute of my life.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much.

[Anand Sehgal]

Approaching a writer's Block? I'm afraid . For God's sake don't !!

fun apart, very good write , though not a Girl Friday trademark one.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Writer's block? Me? Never...lol. Sorry this one didn't suit you, but sometimes the pen does what it will and we have little control over the outcome :) Thank you, my friend, for reading.