Verse 3: Unrequited

Unrequited 

 

Written of a girl, watched her blossom in my book.

Immortalize a woman in verse, develops platonic picture.

Can a vein of unrequited love measure, but one heart.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Good questions came to life in the chapter. Your description and question left the reader with something to ponder. I like the strength in your use of the language. One heart. Each heart built on quicksand held up by the few words of kindness. A very good chapter.
Coyote

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Thx for the review...C...

[DIVYA]

It is in a platonic way that one can impartially measure a friend's true qualities and worth. The girl is your creation, inspired by as such and she takes on all the perfection in your pages to be immortalized in verse. Beautifully written....

[Glen Yumang Manese]

D --- thanks for the feedback...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Just fantastic in a few lines, you describe the elusiveness of love, and the platonic strength... of admire a person, without touch... enjoyed this one.

- Elisa

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I did have this divided a bit more in its original format...but as I went along --- in the making of the book...I decided not to get too fancy with the style...and keep them simple...and direct...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I forgot--- thanks again...

[Pax]

it is like immortalizing the one memory you've once cherished. The first unrequited love just bound to be that way in one stroke of a pen, forever be in the pages of your library. short but very well verse mr. Glen, its great!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Their all different woman by the way...Pax...thanks for the read...short rather tells hidden meanings...what greater way to reflect that --- then to write about each one...

[Pax]

yes it is indeed... a great concept, i like it, and you are most welcome!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Ditto...I'm just now able to get online...Philippines has no electricity and water...I'm in Laguna ---got hit hard by Glenda...of all names --- right...

[Frieda P]

Oh I quite like this one, sometimes a broken heart affects how we deal with future developments of the heart.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Well received and transferred --- FP...thanks again...slept in a bit...long week...

[Frieda P]

You're welcome Glen, sleeping is a very good thang.....

[VelvetRosetta]

This kind of makes one think, not sure your view when writing this but I imagine a man who sees a young woman bloom into her womanhood, but maybe she isnt in love with him?

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Well put in your thoughts...one is in love --- the other is the muse...and the story is divided into two part of narrative and verse...

[VelvetRosetta]

Very creative!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Now...if I can just finish the second part...

[VelvetRosetta]

Lol, I am sure you will make it happen.

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I am still trying to wrap my mind on this 1

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Each poet takes a point of view...and that's what makes verses versatile...yet we are left with more...

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Yes very true:)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Its what you take from it that matters...once you read the novel and my verses --- the answer will unfold...who she is --- and the reason behind the facade...my life's work comes down to it...too much of a perfectionist --- I may never finish the completed version...always adding and changing the plot lines...God help me --- or us all as writers of verse...

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Understand a dear friend taught me a lot about that here she is great speak metaphoric Pryde:) She is the best I ever seen she said A write is what u make of it and every1 will see a different version. That lady is smart on her work:) So yeah get what ur saying, Ahh I think we all are perfectionist in of work we just want it to prove a point or idk just simply make it look just:)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I'm familiar with her works...read a many of hers...reminds me to visit her page now...

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Lol:))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Well --- good chatting here with you...off to explore a bit...a new writer...requested a friendship and I will see --- what's on their plate...just read another one...of yours...

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Thanks u2:))))))))))))))))))

[Glen Yumang Manese]

any time...drop by from time to time...revamping all my writings here...so if they are closed and posted...they are there...just in for an oil change...

[Trevor Barnett]

You captured the beauty of writer's muse that he uses as inspiration. Going into my faves!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Again -- thanks for your time and review...glad you liked it and put this one on your shelf...