Nervous Breakdown

what more can I say

 

Nervous Breakdown

Thanks to everyone who has been so kind,

thanks to all my friends but now I find,

my mental state is way out of whack,

its a real good thing I d ont smoke crack

but my head is screwed feeling like lost,

maybe I'm make believe like Jack Frost,

cause the real world is becoming to much,

feeling like I'm completely out of touch

I hear music and it brings me tears,

these sweet sweet sounds, rolling thru my ears,

I reach out to touch and I reach too far,

thinking like I'm really some big rock star

and though they are polite, and mostly kind,

I know they think, I have lost my mind,

I'm searching too hard, to find someone,

I reach out to touch, and then they run

so it's appearently time, for the looney bin,

maybe just one more glass of dry gin,

I'd put on my pants and head out to town,

but I think Im busy, having a nervous breakdown

Gomer LePoet...

Reviews

[Desert Dreamer]

I think you have found the path of the poet. I think we are all a touch crazy, at least from the viewpoint of a regular non-creative person.

I share some of your feelings here, I feel out of touch and a little lost in this crazy world and have finally given in to these feelings and decided to just be me and to explore this place I have arrived at instead of trying to climb back up to join the rest of the world...join me in the "looney bin". Oh, maybe we are the sane ones and the rest of the world is crazy.

I think you meant "too" in the line "and I reach to far".

[The Analog Kid]

Pretty funny Gomer. I like these light-hearted twists to heavy subjects.

[Wicahpi]

"Woe is me" in this tale of discontentment with
a humorous undertone. I like it!

[ettorney]

GLP I won't be so kind and I don't need your thank you's. YOU are whack. Super freak and warped. And those are the things I like best about you.

This poem really hits the gomer (er...gopher) on the head if you believe that in order to be creative you have to be a bit bent. Wait, I do believe that. Forget I said anything worthwhile in this review. Mind if I join you on the way down?

Nice write

[zombiikillah666]

this..is the bomb diggity fresh. (:

[Dutch Jr.]

You're a master at making a comical situation of a serious matter. This poem is beautifully written.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Funny it is but sad also.. I know how a nervous breakdown starts but haven't got to the finish thus far.
Your poems always flow well. Gomer.. maybe because you are a musician ..
This is humorous with a tinge of sadness...

Chloe

[Ruth]

lol
You know hon, I am not far behind you! lol
A glass of bacardi in my case though lol
xx

[Devons]

With an insidious deftness you manage to be extremely funny and extremely serious at the same time...!
This is very well-written, scans skilfully, the rhyme is excellent, and the flow transcends these previous categories..
I think having an artistic soul and nature always creates problems when amongst normal humanity. Intensity and intelligence are often -I find- scaremongers when dealing with the Average Joes and Joannas, and though you might not think you are giving your true self away, these people will still notice the difference between them and you. And run like hell...!!
Anyway, I ain't givin' no lectures, baby!
But that's why artists so often -as here- get on much better with other artists.. The public are isolated from us -like the world they live in- and all these people would see in this poem is the humour...!!

Nicely balanced piece of work. But I'm sure -as I have often found- people always expect you to be funny.. But is it -like the poem says- just a smoke screen for 'having a nervous breakdown.'...?

[Coyote Poetry]

I have been having a nervous breakdown for 20 years. Now it is my normal shape I'm in now. I like this poem. I know the feeling. Wasn't for words on sheets of paper could lose my sanity. A excellent poem. I was rolling with you.
Coyote