Gosh

 

Gosh

this is one of her favorite words

and everytime I hear her say this

the sweet sounds of soft song birds

comes into my scattered mind

just a simple girl hard working

never asks for much, maybe a kiss

behind a curtain I stand lurking

her scent mesmerizing I find

sweet cherry blossoms, in full bloom

that is the taste of her lips too

petals strewn about the room

her face is in my mind, in everything I do

the more I know about her mind

the more I want to learn, it's true

tried stepping off to the side, away

and sadness colors my world blue

I cannot stand to be out of touch

absense makes my heart grow fonder

I need her presense, sometimes too much

daydream of her, my thoughts, they wander

since this angel landed in my world

time has come to a sudden stop

but if you would meet this beautiful girl

I guarantee your jaw would drop

so gosh be darn, and gosh be diddle

I love this girl more than a little

she makes me laugh, she makes me smile

for a kiss from her, gosh I'd walk a mile

Gomer LePoet...

Reviews

[Color Me Gone]

Gosh, this is a very sweet poem~*smile*

[Gandré]

This poem made me feel well! It is what I need when I read poetry.. Real men understand how special women are. Thanks for leaving me the commentary on my new political article. Hope the life is not treating you bad. LG

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Love this poem it is sweet but not overly.. and gosh is a good word!
Chloe

[?]

Well Gosh,
I hope this girl knows how much she is loved, and how you feel, I hope she feels the same way about you.
This is so cute, really just flows off youre tongue when you read it.
The last is my favorite just so darn cute.
so gosh be darn, and gosh be diddle
I love this girl more than a little
she makes me laugh, she makes me smile
for a kiss from her, gosh I'd walk a mile

[rayven]

I don't typically like when people use quotes and sayings in their poems (Absense makes the heart grow fonder). it makes the poem seem less original and sometimes a bit cliche. I really like this though! I like your flow, your rhymes don't seem forced at all. I also really like the end when you use the word that the poem started off talking about.

I also really like the font, color and style...I know that's not important but it fits. The ending is my favorite part:
"So gosh be darn, and gosh be diddle,
I love this girl more than a little.
she makes me laugh, she makes me smile
For a kiss from her, gosh I'd walk a mile"
Not only because you're using the word "gosh" (As I pointed out earlier) but also because it's like bouncy, cute and almost simple which is how i feel the girl in this poem is.
Again, great job!