It Looks Like Rain

dont look but the storm is coming

 

It looks like rain

gosh I had big ideas I was hoping to be someone

something went wrong with my carefully plotted plan

I stopped to take a look when I clearly should have run

sweet distractions caused the crap to hit the fan

I convinced myself that I could surely make this work

I mean after all it was just a harmless little trek

but this light blinded me and made my blood perk

then I felt the teeth of love bite me on the neck

the sun shined brightly as I walked in a zombie trance

fields of flowers stretched as far as the eye could see

birds singing melodies so sweet as I saw her face advance

she became more beautiful her glow enveloped me

I knew this must surely be someones elses dream

this did not fit at all into my simple minds design

then the clouds began to gather no more gentle stream

the wind began to howl and storms in a distant line

the sun slowly disappeared from the sky turning grey

the thunder clapping and winds sounding like a train

I awakend from my deep sleep and I heard someone say

yes my friend it most certainly looks like rain

Gomer LePoet...

Reviews

[Doreen]

We move from despair to joy and back to despair and sadness again and again. Your imagery in this was good.

[Jeff]

Wonderful imagery!

[?]

Very intense Gomer
Very well written, loved the imagery.
Wait for the rainbow after the rain Gomer
And by rainbow I mean wait for the after thoughts, the looking back thoughts, those wonderful memories that are to be cherished and never ever fogotten.
It's pouring here

[Alicia Schroeder]

Great imagery, Awesome write!!

[deeps]

Gomer, This is really amazing! I like this it felt as if there was hurt and pain
and the rain came and wasshed it all away. Well done!

[Liza]

the poem felt like a tension that will manifest as thunder and lightening..Rain will be the sweet release and wash away

wonderful imagery and thought provoking lines