REGINERATION

Our society is like a Phoenix, regenerating

If we are to not love

But be consumed by hate

Burning In her embers

Bathing in her essence

I pray 

That man continues to drink from her flask

Intoxicated

Stumbling farther into the dark

Stabbing the wound that bore you

Revoking the bosom that coddled you 

Biting the hand that once fed you

I pray 

That we die out

From the blackness of our hearts

The nepotism buried in families

choking the roots

Time 

Used only to 

Articulate an unseen enemies demise

I pray

The knife slicing blindly in the dark

Bites back 

That our gluttony 

Rises 

Then falls with us

Buried in a shallow grave

That our leaders 

Are overthrown 

Their facade as good men

melted away like plastic

That the monuments seemingly permanent

Collapse 

Making us succumb to our inferiority

I pray 

for mankind to become 

A pheonix

I pray for us

 to be reborn from our ashes

When we are 

I pray we remember 

The thread used to weave the new fabric. 

Reviews

[Brianna Van Zandt]

I am going to critique your spelling/grammar here. First, your title.... "Regeneration" not "Regineration." Second: "Articulate an unseen enemies demise." You used "enemies" instead of "enemy's." You are referring to the demise of a specific enemy so it should be "enemy's." Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed this.

[N.S. Jones]

A very moving poem on the corruption of society. I can definitely see disillusionment with society behind this poem. I agree with CookieCrumbs that this poem flows very well. Good repitition of "I pray".
From the other comments I see that you have yet to correct the title, but I love the poems theme of rebirth. My favourite part is the first verse of the poem.

[Bexfinch]

haha yes. I still as the writer know that I am indeed talking about regeneration I probably spelled it wrong :p

[Kenzie Morg]

Agreed. Got your message across and created a beautiful poem in the process.

[frakkevin]

very awesome message, learn from our mistakes....possibly

[lawrence bear]

Mankind will always be in a world with violence, it is our nature. Anger and hate is what fuels it, and it becomes a wildfire that rages. Your piece is dark, just the way I like em.

[CookieCrumbs]

I love the flow of this poem,only problem I see is the title. I believe it's supposed to be Regeneration as Midnight Nightingale said. Your vocabulary was excellent to!Wonderful poem.

[Dane Osborne]

Mankind has always been insane. Even though we've lasted this long, there is nothing about what we do and how we carry on that has ever made any sense. Hope is a funny word that becomes funny because it is usually directed at stability in an unstable existence.

This was an intelligently written poem and i did sincerely enjoy it.

[Sami Khalil]

Mankind is on slippery slope. darkness surround its future. The social order is falling apart. Greed and hunger for power are rampant. We are even loosing trust in our elected officials. Individual and corporate greed rule our lives . I don't believe in socialism but what happened to the good Ole days when people were honorable, life was beautiful with the little things, schools were safe and society was crime free if not rare... Even movies had a good message and entertainment was family oriented . All that has changed for every one is for his own , running after material things but without a balance with the spiritual , rejecting truth and accepting falsehoods , not respecting our elders and teachers and all our elected officials. And above all we are loosing the true love for God, nature and parents, country , wisdom... You have penned a very good poem and touched on all of these important subjects. keep on the journey of truth...

[jwenjwen]

i got chills!! i love the way you put all those words together. its dark as a curse yet still very elegant in its own way..

[mark slade]

Beautiful poetry. I really loved the way it flowed.