She's falling for this boy.

 

She’s falling for this boy, you see,

Even thought she shouldn’t be.

He’s got platinum eyes,

They remind her of the rainy skies.

A voice that makes her heart melt,

And an embrace, so strong, like something she’d never felt.

The passion that rolls down her spine with every kiss,

Is something that she’ll always miss.

The passion is like the heroin that runs through the veins of a drug dealer,

Or like the satisfaction of an abuser.

She’s starting to open up to him.

She hopes that all tears shed become a memory, so dim.

“Escape with me!”

She tries to plea,

But she refuses to let the words out, instead she keeps them in.

What a journey this has been,

I wonder just how much this girl means to that boy.

Does he think her emotions are a toy?

I suppose with time they will come to find out,

What their love is truly about.

She’s falling for this boy, you see,

And everlastingly they shall always be.

Author's Note

Dedicated to Justin. I love you kid.

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Jamie,

This is one of your very best. It is full of quotable lines. The opening is strong and the emotion and intimacy of the poem builds with each line. There is the infatuation of a new love, the sensation of the kiss, the deep intoxicating tingle, the hope that your new love will put an end to past pains, the desire to escape and run away, and the doubt. Is this love shared? What do you mean to the boy? And then closing with confidence that the love will be true and lasting. A very nice package. Sometimes you put together beauties. This is one of them. Extremely well done.

My very best regards,

Rick

[Sexy P3nguin]

I love this poem. YOu did a great job and the ways you described something was amazing. Let me give an example
The passion is like the heroin that runs through the veins of a drug dealer,
Or like the satisfaction of an abuser

I love that so much, its creative, moving, and loving great job

[Jamie S.]

Brings me back to my teenage years so full of puppy love :) This is a wonderful write especially from such a young mind! Youve got alot of talent, keep at it girlfriend!

[Raven Wilson]

I LOVE IT!
I love all the lines, each one is beautiful by itself :D

[deeps]

This is such a wonderful write here I like this alot.
Very well written.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Theres a lot of passion in this piece. You've captured a perfect moment.

[Cassandra D.]

This was amazing!
I enjoyed reading this one as much as I enjoyed reading the others.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Ohh very inspirational.. and the ending shows a sense of wisdom beyond that of someone 13.. to know that that drug will be everlasting.. as in first relationships we always believe and put so much into.. but in reality.. many are slaves to memories of those first kisses, feels and thoughts shared with a partner.. hand in hand with the lust and yearning that comes with the lust and passion. This captured and brought me back to that time though I was 16 .. momentarily.. whereby I was completely uninhibited.. and eager to explore new love. Love is comprised of so many elements.. some of which are a drug and can be dangerous to our thoughts and fantasies.. yet.. the boys thoughts are most often high euphoria.. but due to being a slave to passion mostly in those days.. love is mostly spoken through sometimes unknowing lust.. as he has not yet the tools to know how to maintain such a beautiful garden as of yet... sometimes though.. love shines through.. and great soulmates are born from teen years.. one can truly never know!!! Inside I think that 13 is still too young to explore what could become a drug if not managed.. with such talent.. a balance of school studies, friendship and art would do so many sooo much more good.. I know that's not always easy or reality though.. having children..I loved this..very well-done keep it up! =)

[These Haunted Hallways]

Wow, 'twas a really great poem!! I felt this a lot; and it kind of reminded me of my story i did a while back about relationships. This was fantastic tho. Great words and great emotions displayed here. Good job :)

B.A.

[J.R Schlievert]

i loved this! :) very sweet!

[Domo]

It is a sweet poem I must say.
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