To be among the rest.

This poem is for one of my frnd..who thinks that he is unable to do anything in his life..I hope u got it wat I mean..don't give up!!

I'm lack of talent so i'm scared inside,
I feel weak to control the bridle of my life,
I'm so incompetent that keeps me isolate from the rest,
Then i asked myself
Can't i be the best?

I may be blunderous,
But it doesn't mean ,
That i'm useless,
It means m crude,
However its better than be rude..

Ther is something bulky at the bottom of my heart,
I can feel it,
But unable to utter it...


But now, i suffered a lot,
That driven me to catapault,
From worst to best,
To be among the rest.....

Author's Note

Kindly leave your reviews and suggestion so I can improve my writing:)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

No right or wrong in life. Just us struggling to do some good.
"But now, i suffered a lot,
That driven me to catapault,
From worst to best,
To be among the rest."
I understand this poem. My dear Grandfather taught me. You will fall down often. After each fall, we will get up wiser and smarter. A wise man don't repeat errors and mistakes. Thank you Govind for sharing your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

[Govind singh]

Thnk u for Ur precious tym and precious review...

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Einstein Noodle]

i feel you in this one Govind ... who hasn't felt inadequate at one time or another?! your poem is instantly relatable to me .. and its emotive because of all the feelings that go with that of inadequacies .. there is a language challenge but honestly i skipped right over them ... the more you write the more you will become familiar with our very crazy complicated English language ;) there is a simplicity in the depth of this experience and endears your protagonist to me ... in a couple lines especially but this one i really like:
"Ther(e) is something bulky at the bottom of my heart, " .... love it! that lump felt ... could hardly swallow ;)
E.

[Govind singh]

Thnks for being honest reviews...Ur reviews really worked.m little bit more focused on writing;)

[R.E. Ray]

The message is strong and well structured. Perhaps a few minor edits, and it will be even better. The lesson here is simple but not easy (yes, there is a distinction). Happiness is a product of competence, and competence comes from experience, often failed experiences. But, every experience instructs. So, we get up and try again and again and again. Then, with time and experience, you truly can be the best.

[Govind singh]

Thnk u for stopping and reading my poem...thnks again for Ur review and precious tym..

[DIVYA]

Hi Govind. This poem may need to address some grammar issues. But the message is clearly understood and its just great.

[Govind singh]

Thnks Divya for Ur precious tym and pre IOUs review...I will surely work on it..means a lot..

[John Ciarmello]

I thought this an interesting read Govind! It was well structured in the sense of flow! You controlled the readers eyes in this piece which I believe is part of the bottom line to a good piece of poetry. "There is something bulky at the bottom of my heart." A wonderful and surprising bit of imagery, Govind! So well done! Best wishes! Please write on!

[Govind singh]

Thnk u again sir John...Ur reviews always encourages me.

[Lydia Shutter]

We all must strive to be the best we can be, but comparing oneself to the rest of the world is counterproductive. It only leads to anxiety and stress. Well written. Lydi**

[Govind singh]

Thank u for Ur kind words...the poem is all about the moment when we r depressed and think about life and career..btw thnks once again for Ur precious time..