Tuned In

I would like to know
what your heartbeat sounds like
as you fall asleep
To tune my inhalations
to your breaths
and maybe feel what it must be like
to be so completely yours

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

I sometimes hear that sound the predator makes from those Predator movies...

[Brandon Houser]

Very sweet and tender. The reader feels in sync with your words. Well played Green

[Lorry]

Synchronicity in a relationship is easier said than done, but when it works it really works.it is the adult version of a comfy blankie, where comfort is so easily and instantly found.
That's opposed to my actual comfy blanket now, which is my beanie hats, which I insist on it being because I am from a cold climate and not because my hair is thinning! 😀

[Chris]

Now this one has a lot of heart and leaves a gentle smile behind the eyes.

[Desert Knave]

I definitely like the intimacy without any graphic nature to it. Excellent write. ~Jim

[Rosie C]

Wow, this has so much sweetness and cuteness to it.

I also get the vibe that you like to treasure your moments.

It’s very heart-warming, kind, safe and inviting.

Enjoyable read.

[Thomas W Case]

This is intimate without being intrusive—soft, yearning, and carefully restrained.
The closing line lands with a vulnerable surrender that feels earned, not asked for.

[Broken Soul]

I really like this. Short, sweet, and many feelings.

[Relic]

Hmm? what happened to my comment? I know I left one? Hmm?

[Green]

I think that was the other site :)

[Relic]

Ahh, perhaps you're right. Thanks, I thought I was losing it. :)

[K. Louis]

The idea of matching breath and heartbeat feels very intimate. The short lines and simple words make the feeling stronger. It's quiet, sweet, and full of emotion.