Fractured

Written 5/25/15 Chisel Away

Negative thoughts
Chisel their way into
My skull barrier
Sculpting
The marble that is my mind.
[End]

Reviews

[kyam]

Beautifully written. Feelings from the cranium run deep into many souls chipping away at the spirit. Only to embark on deeper freedoms per say.

[GreenEyedPoet]

Thank you Kyam! :]

[Ana B.]

Thank Sereena for sending this, an outstanding write, conjuring deep thoughts.

[GreenEyedPoet]

Thanks Ana!

[alf]

Hi GreenEyedPoet. Brevity, description, great word choice. you have delivered it all!!! Love this, and I will be back on site real soon!!! alf

[GreenEyedPoet]

Thanks Alf! Glad you liked my poem! :D

[alf]

No problem!!! Send me anything you'd like me to read!! alf

[GreenEyedPoet]

I think we have to be friends to be able to send RR's. Or am I wrong about that?

[alf]

Probably, but I can fix that!!!

[nazia]

Marvelous. Thanks to Sereena who sent me the RR.
A perfect description of how the negativity brings us down. Lovely :)

[GreenEyedPoet]

Thank you Nazia! :]

[Anne Verona]

And that's the reality of how negative thoughts are. Brilliant :)

[GreenEyedPoet]

Very true Anne.
Thanks for stopping by and checking it out! :)

[Anne Verona]

No problem :)

[andrew mitchell]

GEP OUTSTANDING WORK THAT BLEW ME AWAY!

[GreenEyedPoet]

Aw thanks AM, that made me smile. :)

[B]

Making the perfect
Piece of art

[GreenEyedPoet]

Wow, thank you Nisreenaa! :)

[~]

Until you put a mirror
and their fractured pain
tore darkness apart--
I can smile again :D

no chiseling away into my friend's skull :D

[GreenEyedPoet]

Little to late, the chiseling started days ago lol.
Thanks for checking my poem out MS! :]

[~]

:D you are always welcome sweet one :D

[GreenEyedPoet]

Me sweet? lol. I think you're confusing yourself with me MS, you're the sweet one! :D

[~]

no no, i know exactly what I am talking about :D trust me!

[GreenEyedPoet]

I'm still sticking with my idea that you're the sweet one. :P

[~]

how about a tie then? we are both sweet? and let's keep it a secret lol

[GreenEyedPoet]

Oh, I don't think it's a secret that you're sweet MS. Pretty sure everybody on WC knows that already! :D

[~]

you too dear, you too :D

[GreenEyedPoet]

I'll agree to disagree, how about that? lol.

[~]

:D no way :D aren't you just proving my point by shying away? :D

[GreenEyedPoet]

Lol I could make my point that I'm not sweet, but you should disagree no matter what I say.
Nothing I say will change your mind and I know that, so that's why I'm agreeing to disagree haha.

[Gee]

Right you two Ill sort this out,"IM THE SWEETEST SWEETIE IN SWEET LAND!!!" Oh,by the way,morning ladies....

[GreenEyedPoet]

Lmao that was too funny Gee.
And good morning to you too! :]

[sereenaoutloud]

oh yep Gee has you beat girlies he is bar far the sweetest !! :))

[sereenaoutloud]

although I'm a close second so you 2 gotta fight for 3 place hehehe

[GreenEyedPoet]

I'm not fighting for the position, it can gladly go to MS. :]

[~]

:D I stand by my decision it is a TIE!!! :D

[GreenEyedPoet]

To late, I already said you get 3rd place! :P

[~]

too late, I abdicate :D

[GreenEyedPoet]

Guess 3rd place will stay empty then! :P lol

[~]

as you wish sweetie ;)

[GreenEyedPoet]

I'll just Sereena to agree with me. :P haha

[sereenaoutloud]

Lol ..you too so stubborn. Changing it to first place for stubbornness..oh look you both tie heheheh

[~]

hehehe :D yes, sweet stubborn girls right? :D

[sereenaoutloud]

oh yeh...my gorgeous stubborn girlies!! :)

[GreenEyedPoet]

I'm definitely taking first place for that one lol.
I'm the most stubborn person you guys will ever meet, you just don't know it yet. :P lmao.

[~]

oh, finally she admitted that she is sweet :D

[GreenEyedPoet]

I said no such thing! I said I was stubborn lol.

[sereenaoutloud]

lol yeh and that she was gorgeous...double whammy !! :)

[GreenEyedPoet]

I never claimed that either! Gorgeous would never come out of my mouth if I were speaking about myself lol. You guys are putting words in my mouth! lol.

[~]

OH yes!!! so, case closed - gavel goes BANG!!!

[GreenEyedPoet]

No! lol.
I made no agreement to being sweet or gorgeous lol.

[~]

too late :D nothing happens after the gavel - ask anyone :D

[sereenaoutloud]

yep I'm anyone and moonskittles right...so sorry "sweet gorgeous greeneyes' it is ..ok thats a bit long so SGG ..welcome to the girlie club...

[~]

well said anyone :D lol -- okay time for me to string those zzzzz's :D good night beautiful ladies :D

[GreenEyedPoet]

Oh you guys have just started a war, you guys aren't getting off this easy! lol. :P
But for now, sweet dreams MS. :]

[sereenaoutloud]

Night night Moonskittle x

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Well...dark and powerful write. Very well penned, it reflects me almost perfectly. Rating 100# I'd like to thank Sereena for the read request.

[GreenEyedPoet]

I'd say I'm glad you could relate to this piece, but that wouldn't be a good thing lol.
I wouldn't want anyone to allow negative thoughts to sculpt their mind, it never ends with good results haha.
Thanks for checking it out IM! :]

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome

[dan]

A title? How about "Skullpture?" sereena sent this to me to review and I'm so glad she did. I wish I could write short, powerful pieces like this. Mine aren't bad but they are all approximately the same length. A mind made of marble? Priceless. I'm bookmarking your page and will try to review some more ASAP. Very nice write! take care...dan

[GreenEyedPoet]

Thanks for the title suggestion Dan! I decided to go with the suggestion that Sereena gave me - Fractured.
It's not often that I write short pieces, I was gonna add more to it but Sereena thought I should leave it as is. :)
Thanks for stopping by and taking some time to check my poem out! Hope if you get a chance to check any others out that you enjoy them! :)