Plastered Paint

poem about being scared that after death love is no more and what we made on earth doesn't matter anymore.

Lost in a world plastered in paint.

Smeared from this existence,

without a complaint.

Time involves distance,

life stays the same.

People tend to think of love as a game.

 

Fear that one day life is no more,

remembered by people you chose to ignore.

Can’t let you know this pain that I feel,

cant bare to show you the hurt I conceal.

Won’t let you see I’m scared to be here.

Won’t let you whisper your love in my ear.

Can’t let you do this,

it’s you that I miss.

Reminisce

how I felt after love's first kiss.

Reviews

[prim]

i felt the same way, until i realized that even if love is no more after death, we should make the most of today and not worry about tomorrow. or at least that's my philosophy, i don't want to tell people how they SHOULD feel. maybe i should have worded that differently....
but this was beautiful, regardless. keep up the good work, i've read great things from you!

[Siddhartha]

a beautiful poem...as bittersweet as life itself...
P.S.- A typo.methinks you missed an apostrophe in the last line-'loves'.

[Moflo]

I like the existential theme of this a lot. Your rhymes are perfect, as usual, and as is your pacing! You really capture the idea of nothingness and the fear one could have upon realizing. Fantastic write!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

Fear that one day life is no more

remembered by people you chose to ignore

that really struck me. the whole poem is very powerful with very deep meaning, but especially so for that particular line.

[Ashley Myers]

this was really good!!! so easy to read and so very poetic!!!

[Jim Parson]

Although you have captured the essence of the uncertainty of life and love perfectly, you need not fear. You will be remembered for your amazing talent. If I wasn't alone right now, I would start a wave. Beautiful, oh green one!

[OT]

nice!! I like that you change up the rhyme scheme going into the couplets in the second stanza (and end of first) - nice flow!! great rhymes! great poem!