Once was Unalloyed, Now it is Destroyed

You broke my heart

to pieces

small

and now 

it is 

destroyed.

Forever mixed

with hues of black--

never

unalloyed

Reviews

[MandaBear]

Beautifully simple. Well written words. Great job!

[guy drori]

Thank you :)

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Beautiful writing...Font formatting enhanced the impact of the writing...well crafted (y)

[guy drori]

Thank you ... so glad you liked it :)

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Most welcome : D

[Ada]

I liked your use of the colors to emphasize your poem.
To me, it was like a red beating heart turning into a black hole.
Flowed nicely.

[guy drori]

Thank you for your kind words ! Yes, the colors really do help emphasize, you're right. They even helped me with writing the poem :)

[Sami Khalil]

The title is excellent. The poem is short but powerful with all the emotions involved....:)....

[guy drori]

Thank you, appreciate your comment

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ...:)......

[Shivai]

Beautiful! It was short and sweet and the the words were simple, but had a great impact on me. Plus the font colours: red for heart, black for dark, grey for loss "destroyed" made it even more effective. Loved it!

[guy drori]

Thank you for your kind words ! ...I'm so glad you enjoyed this... :)