A Nightly Sky

Some observe the nightly sky

merely as a simple view,

but I observe that sky

as gap of wasted years.

In times we could have laughed

instead we spent

in causing tears.

 

The devil's artwork, many claim--

paint upon the morning blue.

Either way that summer sun

abandoned me and you.

 

Oh, how I dearly wish

that summer sun

be coming back--

illuminate

our past mistakes

colored ever black.

                                            

Reviews

[Alessander]

but I observe that sky

as gap of wasted years.

Good lines. When we look at stars, we're in reality watching light traveling from dying suns, so the night sky can indeed be "wasted yrs" - something that at one time may have been vibrant and warmth, but now the last brief rays of light are hitting alien eyes and planets.

Good description of lost love and time.

[guy drori]

Thanks for the revieew Alessander :) and yes, I also agree with what you said about the stars

[RomaineCoppola]

Wow. This is such a complex and grand piece of poetry. Truly inspiring, honestly.

[guy drori]

Thanks! :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You have a unique insight. Love your thoughts.

[guy drori]

Thanks you very much

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Raul Moreno]

Profound piece of work nicely written

[guy drori]

Thank you very much

[marilyn 1225]

I really liked this poem of angst sadness and also beauty

[guy drori]

Thank you very much for the review :)

[David O Whalen (O Haol..]

I liked this very much guy! besides being technically correct (spelling, grammar, etc) I like the fact that it's not run of the mill and instead shows good imagination and willingness to write to a different drummer!

[guy drori]

Thanks for the reply David! I'm glad you liked it (Sorry for the late reply)

[ReedWrite]

I am a huge fan of unconventionality...and your work always tics that box for me.
There is a wistfulness here...a longing that comes through your words. I love the concept of the summer sun illuminating our past mistakes that are colored black. That last stanza was awesome. Great poem. Nice work.

[guy drori]

I appreciate the words of encouragement . . . thank you :) and yes I agree with you

[Levi Levin]

A very illuminating piece of poetry! Great work!

[guy drori]

Thank you vey much

[aLittlePain]

Hi Guy, I'm of the thought it's never too late especially if we can leave the past exactly where it belongs.
We have a tough time with this. Gorgeous night imagery with words thick with regret, pain... beautiful expressive piece. R xo

[guy drori]

Appreciate the review . . . and glad you liked.
I hold on your thought as well - sometimes it's best to leave the past where it belongs.