Will thou love me?

Admittedly I do not know where this piece should be classified. Sometimes I just write for sanity and this sort of thing is what you will find there.

Will thou love me for the sake of love?

Will thou love me for the sake of others?

Or will thou love me for the sake of me?

I beg that thou love me for the sake of oneself.

Then such a love may shine forth like the blossom of spring. Refreshed in the glorious dawns first light.  Not unlike the newness of a tiny babe; ever changing, ever growing, ever precious.

But, if thou love me for loves own sake, for the sake of others, or for mine own sake; then love me not.

For the love of loves sake is only folly and shall soon fade and be made replacement by disgust. 

 To love me for the sake of others is just as false and only shows the lover weak in fortitude.  Loving not of his own free will but instead to impress his comrades and such a love will soon end in misery on both parts; feeling the shame of such a falsehood.

 While to love me for my own sake is to love me not; but to love me for the sake of pity, and pity is not that which I should choose in a lover.  For as much as you would pity me, I shall for the sake of pity share in pity for you.  Then we two lovers shall both be false and confuse pity for love.

Oh no, give to me a steady man who knows his own heart and is free to love wholly with it.  Such a man who is not afraid of such a heart as beats within this breast and can match wits with such a mind as such blood feeds.  Show to me a man as can know his own heart and be constant with his knowledge doing that which is right and good.  Give to me a man who finds fire in his heart and passion in his soul. A man who fears not the fire in his heart that ignites his mind and sparks his soul but instead embraces, no, cherishes such a heart. 

Show to this heart a man who will love for his own sake and who knows his own heart.  If such a man can exist and find that his heart can beat for me and mine for thee; then I shall love him with all of my own heart until the end of my days.

 

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

This reminds me of Romeo and Juliet.

A very well written and excellent piece. I would be silly to say I am in love with this piece, as truely what is love, but an extreme emotion. And where there is love there must be a balance of hate. I ramble. Kinda my thing.

Excellent flow, excellent structure. Great work

regards,

Matthew

[UnholyFate]

Beautifully written, with a meaning one might take as a lesson to her own heart.

[Chaos X 3]

I really like this piece for many reasons.
So often in our pursuit for love or "love" we would have answered "yes" to all of your questions. "Yes! I will love you for Love's sake, for your sake, and for others, easily." :) Now what I REALLY love about your poem is how you then go on to point out the error of our foolish ways. How eager we were to rush to an answer that we (as the reader) thought would please you. Everything stated was clear an precise and entirely truthful. I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing. :)

[A Paquet]

all i can think is a girl outside on the balcony, sharing thoughts with the moon...great piece!

[Brittni]

I have to agree with Matthew's comment about it being similiar to Romeo and Juliet. I am glad that I was requested to read this. Very raw and true emotion. This is a place where voice can't do justice the way writing and words can. Thank you for a beautiful poem.

[al25]

Really liked your writing style. It gives the writing a lot more depth. Anyway i thought this was really well written. Enjoyed reading it.

[Roxi L]

I agree with Matthew. This does sound like Romeo and Juliet, yet I feel alot of originality and I like it. A classic and a modern view mixed. Well Done

~Writing keeps the dream alive~
Roxi

[Grace Catherine C.]

Stunning, brilliant, I loved it!

[Brad]

classic lit with a hint of modern day

[EGabriellS]

This is very good. I really like how much passion I see in this piece. Thank you for sharing it with me. :)

[Alexa Tasch]

really great! there is so much emotion and truth in this piece! I "loved" it!!!