American Bullfighter

A relationship gone bad of course.

American Bullfighter

 

I saw you coming

   And I chose

       Not to get out of the way.

 

So pretty

      So fierce

          so full of angst?

 

A needed distraction you where

       Yet you showed me nothing

          new.

 

I act so righteous sometimes

       I miss a good opportunity

          at conquest.

 

Yet your

      persistent.

         You entice.

            You goad.

                You lie.

           …again…

I saw you coming

     and I chose

        not to get out of the way.

 

How many swords

       before you go down?

              I didn’t have to ask.

How many times

        so you’ll quit asking?

How many times

        so you’ll leave me alone?     

 

Once again in the arena.

   and then 

     something I’m not expecting.

                 You gored me.

In comes the second.

       I wasn’t prepared for that.

    I wasn’t booed out

             the arena.

    I wasn’t carried out.

…and then I realized

            you only wanted what I had.

                  I bled long.

                       I cried

                           but only for effect.

 

You just snorted

    and waited on the second.

 

I saw you coming

        and I chose

               not to get out

                           the way.

 

 

Author's Note

One of those relations that you know isn't going to work but you do it anyway.

Reviews

[Meet Lola, The Better H..]

This was interesting. something I could relate to which is nice.
The ending is a bit abrupt... well really abrupt... by I'm a bit out of it since I havn't eaten today >.< [I can't cook and we have nothing instant and i'm starving] So it could just be that my stumach has more control right now than my head. But I did like this.
Very unique.

[Caitbabie008]

This was very good I like how you wrote it and made it curvery and everything

[Tenten]

i feel bad for some reason, don't get hurt anymore. this one pulled harshly on these heart strings. very good good and expressive piece with amazingly beautiful imagery. be safe.

[Madonna Starr]

I saw you coming

and I chose

not to get out

the way

[[I think this just about says it all.. Sometimes we get into things we know are the best for us just to experience something.. We don't always know exactly what it is that we hope to get out of a situation thats destined to fail from the start; but its the path of the journey we have come to face.. Great work on this piece, I feel you did an excellent job of using the bull fight to symbolize a rocky relationship]]

[Lydia Shutter]

Sometimes the heart makes decisions that will impact the head negatively...or visa versa. That stanza repeated is so telling, so powerful, so perfect.
"i saw you coming...
and I chose...
not to get out the way."

Reminds me of an old saying, "I'll run just fast enough to let you catch me." I enjoyed this very much, my friend. Lydia

[Kalliope [ u g l y b e ..]

I really enjoy this poem, and the imagery presented in it. Nice work!

In particular i love the lines

"i saw you coming...
and I chose...
not to get out the way."

I love the repetition used throguhout the poem with these lines. It's like, I never learn, I know what is coming, what you are about to do to me, but still i wait for it to happen. Kind of futile..i. I love it.

keep up the good work
Char ox.

[Zeva]

".....again
I saw you coming" The only issue I have with this is that there are five periods and not three, and the ellipsis uses three and I'm wicked OCD about that. Just a personal thing. ^__^

Loved the metaphor, and the ending is great as always. The second and last thing I'd change is the ending paragraph--the "i" should be capitalized.

An enjoyable read as always, my friend.

[Crystal L. Test]

The following lines were my favorite:

I saw you coming
and I chose
not to get out the way.

It kind of sounds like someone who sees a car wreck, doesn't want to look but then can't help themselves. LOL Very unique perspective. Very thought provoking and honest. Thanks for sharing.

[Sonia Nunez]

very deep and emotional. i just like it personally. i can't explain it. good work as always

[Sandra V.]

"I saw you coming
and I chose
not to get out the way"

I love that line, it sticks with me...

[Mr. Deft Diction]

This is a nice play HAM. You did an excellent job in describing this feeling from a male perspective; after all, we're not supposed to be in this rut--and you crying for only "effect" is marvelous. Keep moving, MAN!

GREAT WRITE!