American Bullfighter

A relationship gone bad of course.

American Bullfighter

 

I saw you coming

   And I chose

       Not to get out of the way.

 

So pretty

      So fierce

          so full of angst?

 

A needed distraction you where

       Yet you showed me nothing

          new.

 

I act so righteous sometimes

       I miss a good opportunity

          at conquest.

 

Yet your

      persistent.

         You entice.

            You goad.

                You lie.

           …again…

I saw you coming

     and I chose

        not to get out of the way.

 

How many swords

       before you go down?

              I didn’t have to ask.

How many times

        so you’ll quit asking?

How many times

        so you’ll leave me alone?     

 

Once again in the arena.

   and then 

     something I’m not expecting.

                 You gored me.

In comes the second.

       I wasn’t prepared for that.

    I wasn’t booed out

             the arena.

    I wasn’t carried out.

…and then I realized

            you only wanted what I had.

                  I bled long.

                       I cried

                           but only for effect.

 

You just snorted

    and waited on the second.

 

I saw you coming

        and I chose

               not to get out

                           the way.

 

 

Author's Note

One of those relations that you know isn't going to work but you do it anyway.

Reviews

[Meet Lola, The Better H..]

This was interesting. something I could relate to which is nice.
The ending is a bit abrupt... well really abrupt... by I'm a bit out of it since I havn't eaten today >.< [I can't cook and we have nothing instant and i'm starving] So it could just be that my stumach has more control right now than my head. But I did like this.
Very unique.

[Talon Sjostrom]

I honestly got nothing from this poem. I really didn't get it. The bull, you, the matador... It was a cool read, but I was lost throughout the whole thing. If you could fill me in, that would be great.

[Sethunya]

American Bullfighter reminds me of feuds. Then fighting was a sport and glamorous, something more of a more glamorous design than boxing. The manner of dress was elaborate, extensive details of feathers and armour, not just fabric, scotch pads and velcro. I see the "words", I hear the"conquest" and I am driven that far back in time. I hear the "arena" and leap into the future. This is the greatest tension I felt in a long time!

[OceanK.]

damn, sounds like suicide, kinda...

[Randall Richard]

good metaphore. well done

[Annie]

the way you use words is stunning. "I cried, but only for effect." the "effect" of that line is beautifully cruel. I'm wondering about the allusion to the public nature of the metaphor- as though those around you expect a good show from your pain? or am i reading more in than what is there? Great work.

[Robert Luna]

Very interesting as almost if the bullfighter realized that he was killing another animal for doing exactly what he was trying to do, survive. Very thought provoking. Great Job!!!

[D . R . Marais]

I bled long.
I cried
but only for effect.

haha nice... an interesting poem on what seems to of been a complicated relationship. those fiesty girls will get ya, I know one and she totally turns me on while at the same time she totally tears me apart... I sometimes wonder what the f**k is wrong with me haha... i like how you emphasize that you saw her coming and chose not to get out of the way, as if it was expected... good write

[Nicole M. Isabella]

/I saw you coming
and I chose
not to get out the way. /...love it! I keep reading this piece over and over again. I find myself finding more and more as i strip the layers away. I love the whole "feel" of the piece. Wanting something that you know is going to hurt and standing your ground even though you know it is going to leave you with a bad taste in your mouth. Kudos! Originality!
With respect,
N*

[Esra]

I agree the metaphor is cool, very original, its also very emotional, and it flows well because as the reader I was very interested in what was happening and how it wud end, very cool