Sad Snail

crawling along

thinking of my day

I wonder why

the world is at play

for I have been forgotten

left in the dust

but with the will of mine

I will one day again trust

I know I move slower

and cannot keep the pace

but I am not to be left

for as I crawl I leave a trace

I wonder far and wide

all about the rosie world

hunkering and hampering

in a blissful heaven sent whirl

slower I maybe

so small that I do seem

but I to dream of life

and all the finer things

yes a sad snail 

with antennas for eyes

I am to a part, integral

that makes this world so wise

Reviews

[quinfinn]

snails....sluggish, slimy, clumsy and easy prey for birds. makes one wonder why you would personify such a creature....although your analogy makes perfect sense to me, this is a profoundly interesting and engaging write. the more i look at it, the more i see the point. well done!

[Holly Mason]

it's slimy trail is left wherever it goes
I find it hilarious to think of a snail as clumsy-read moreit's slimy trail is left wherever it goes
I find it hilarious to think of a snail as clumsy-
to me everything that has been created no matter what the choice for creator deserves a word or two
some things seem so small but look into them and they are 10 feet tall
thank you for looking further appreciate much truly

[quinfinn]

i say clumsy...because they have to carry their apartment with them wherever they go...that has got to be wretched. clever write, Holly

[Holly Mason]

clever apartment reference
thanks for the smile

[quinfinn]

welcome, love!

[Yellow Butterfly]

This was an amazing write.....

You have penned a wonderful message Holly that snails have an 'integral' right to be here on this earth too :O)

[Holly Mason]

everything matters no matter how small it may seem*)
thank you so for reading

[Yellow Butterfly]

I believe this too.......you penned this so well Holly......

[kelvin]

creative minds think to find writing inspiration in the smallest and slowest of things such as a snail, expressing the challenges or rather sorrows a snail endures daily, but yet the snail never gives up it just moves along not in a rush on to it's destination. Talent indeed you have it

[Holly Mason]

you as well glad we met
thank you for slowly leaving a trace or how about thank you for reading*)

[kelvin]

Your're very welcome and and I am also glad we met as well shine bright

[Devanshu Rajput]

a beautifully constructed poem expressing the pain of a snail which moves slow but steadily.....my heed was much attracted towards your greatly rhymed lines........

''I wonder why
the world is at play
for I have been forgotten
left in the dust
but with the will of mine
I will one day again trust
I know I move slower
and cannot keep the pace
but I am not to be left
for as I crawl I leave a trace''

they lines left me to say.................wonderful

[Holly Mason]

thank you so truly

[Devanshu Rajput]

your welcome

[Distant horizons]

A beautiful perspective. We are all a part of this crazy thing called life.

[Holly Mason]

down to the smallest slowest component*)
what did the snail say when he rode on top of the turtle?
wwweweweweweweweewwwwweeeeeee*)

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[therisa]

It's not the size or the speed of a person, err snail that matters, rather the heart, which they share that truly matters.

[Holly Mason]

we do not all have back bones we do not all have conventional lungs but everything has a heart*) thank you so for reading

[therisa]

Your welcome, Holly.