Open Your Eyes

Why don't you open your eyes,

And notice the absentee?

Those deep beautiful eyes;

Why don't they see me?

What else can I do

to get back the chance I blew?

This beating in my chest,

yearning for you and your best.

This endless sleepless night,

reliving that final fight.

I hope to see you around the bend,

but I may be chasing till the end.

Author's Note

I appreciate constructive criticism and comments!

*reuploaded from my old account: http://www.writerscafe.org/HannahTaylor

Reviews

[¿]

I guess this came up in yout mind while taking a deep breath and thinking of something beloved!
It's lovely and sad and good flowed at a time for me...thanks for sharing😊

[Hannah]

Thank you for reading, Tahsin. I'm glad you enjoyed reading.

[¿]

You're heartedly welcome!

[Diane]

This poem flowed nicely. You seem to have emotional poems down.

[Hannah]

I appreciate you saying so. Thank you for reading.

[...]

Nice rhyming and flowing it make really nice sound when I read it. Also very moving story in between words. I really like it.

[Hannah]

Thank you very much.

[...]

You welcome nicely done.

[Justin]

that was really great, it tell a romantic story, it is set up really great, amazing job Hannah :)

[Hannah]

Thank you, Justin! Glad you enjoyed reading.

[Justin]

your welcome, I do enjoy reading your material :)