Rain

The cold makes me shiver

It chills me from the inside out

Although the clouds can block out the sun

They cease to block my fear

I can feel the drops coming down

Is the rain falling or am I?

 

Author's Note

I love criticism.

Reviews

[Jessie Sianodel]

very nice poem although I can't understand how the rain scares people I love it! lol

The last line is bothering me though. it doesn't seem like it fits with the rest of the poem, kind of random and a little cheesy/cliche-ish. So I think you should change the last line. Other than that, great poem with very good descriptions.

[nono]

I like this poem a lot but it's not what i expected i mean i thought you might be telling emotions you have in the rain, but instead i got something completely different. And that's what any reader would want to read.

[Loner]

THis is beautiful as it is.