Haiku #4

the little girl sits
in the very last bus seat
looking back to home

Author's Note

Any ideas for improvements?

Reviews

[EloisaWrites]

This is beautiful. I wonder what the little girl thinks about. And, I cannot answer your question for improvements. Sorry. :)

[Jared Michael Smith]

In my mind, she was riding the school bus for the first time, so to me she thinks about going back home and not facing this new experience of school. And thank you. :)

[EloisaWrites]

Aha. So, that was it. :)

[Jared Michael Smith]

Yep, that was it. :)

[Andrea]

I think it is wonderful just as it is. For me it is a poem that triggers both a visual and an emotional response. Beautiful.

[Jared Michael Smith]

Thank you! :)