Mr. Oh Mr.

A prostitutes song if you will.I thought about it sitting in class one last week.A twisted love story.

Pretty eyes lure him in, entrancing his mind with thoughts of their sin
Follow me she says. Mr. what is your name?
I am the one you desire. Mr. you put your women to shame
Mr. Passion is built and you say you want the Eiffel Tower
Give me your day and I’ll turn it into ours
The sweet smell of love intoxicating aroma
Mr. Love is an effort I wish not to put forward
Energy is all .I don‘t want better or worse
Make you fall for me, the making of a tragedy
Mr. I can’t tell you how long this game will last
Won’t ask you to trust me because trust runs fast
But I’m asking you Mr. what your name is?
When your heart finally shatters I will not take the blame

Author's Note

A prostitutes song if you will.I thought about it sitting in class one last week.A twisted love story.

Reviews

[Audrie]

This is a sad but lovely piece or work. I enjoyed the way it sways from innocence to indifference and great importance to little care for the act of seduction for ones own desires. I understand much of what you have said. I grew immensely impatient, careless and callous towards men. I feel as though they were a waste of my time - with the exception of my kiddos fathers - they are amazing - thank buddha! I decided to take a sabbatical from relationships in order to gain my self esteem back. Anyways - I just really connected with this piece, thanks for sharing. Also, I am making a private book of poems that really speak to me and I am wondering if I may copy it. I would, of course, give you copyright priveliges and it's really just for me. I would never try to take credit for your writing, however, I would love to have it. Let me know and thanks! peace, balance and harmony - audrie

[?]

Nicely written,
love the line
Make you fall for me, the making of a tragedy
wow
great poem

[Ice QueenJen]

great poem about a twisted lifestyle, she asks what his name is yet she really doesn't care..... to many live this way too.

[Daydreamer54]

I like it!it's very mysterious and of course...twisted, like u said! I loved it though! great write! :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

intriguing interpretation of what may run through such a lady's mind as she is trying to get with the means to the endz~

[EMP]

this is so good! really impressive rhyme and rhythm with powerful words. i don't know what more to say... extremely excellent write. well done. :)

[Alex]

This Poem is awesome. I've never been intrigued so much by a piece before. You can tell there is more than meets the eye and that adds to the suspense. Great job!

[Rory CJ Frankson]

[Give me your day and I’ll turn it into ours] ~Bravo~ Great Line

They call him... Mister Fame. This flame so haloed, with a look. The moves. Baby, this man, knows all the grooves. Flash an Bling, these passions sing... ring a ding that thing, honey. Mister Fame won't accept the blame, only blush through the shame game... as your heart, lays in tatters. Hear the chatter, as he spreads round your name. Talkin whatever, an thats lame.
Hey Mister Shallow talkin trash. Cause trust, ain't the mans middle name...
Ha ha ha, I like it like that, like a Happy Accident waiting to happen... Cool, Write On / Right On. Romon

[Ian Faraway]

'Mister'... sorry it bugged me there was 'Mr.' but no name afterwards so you would use 'Mister' but I can see why you would use Mr.... it adds on to the mystery and suspense of the story. Well written yet again, Happy

[The Water Queen]

This was beautifully written. Great poem.