Grounded

Once again, someone who is no longer in my life. I think this does the whole idea better justice.

I hath wilted with the disdain nary of piety, 

For faith bade me good riddance four seasons ago;

My wounds lick the salt from thy notoriety, 

Parching the heart with the drought of woe. 

Perhaps I ought not to sit upon the spent;

Gossamer clouds dost seek vindication for none all too clear. 

I shall listen merely to my ground friend, the meadowlark’s lament 

To rid me of my musings austere.  

O the merry days held such wistful mind,

Pray thy rope of ash betwixt us fester and burn;

But no ocean can submerge the ties that bind,

Nor cease these flames that heighten churn.

Reviews

[Erinne S.]

I love the style this is written in. It gives the piece elegance and gracefulness. Very well done!

~Erinne

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Again with the Shakespearean style, huh? I think this is reallyreallyreally good.
"I hath wilted with the disdain nary of piety, For faith bade me good riddance four seasons ago;" ,
"But no ocean can submerge the ties that bind, Nor cease these flames that heighten churn."
I am comprehending this one line at a time, and yes, I think this done the idea better justice, too. This is kinda a sucky review and i apologize, i guess i just dont know what to say. but i really like it.

[Derek S.Keck]

Beautifully written! You write like the poets of old, and the way you frame each stanza is wonderful!

[Abdul Aziz]

Nice experiment. Conveying real emotions in a language quite unfamiliar to the modern world requires effort and talent. The only minor quibble I have is with the length of the lines in the second stanza. That shouldn't take much away from the poem, though. It is very good.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of old words. Made the poem a pleasure to read. So many lines stood out for me in the poem.
"I shall listen merely to my ground friend, the meadowlark’s lament
To rid me of my musings austere. "
A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Hayley your writing is ancient..........I would love to meet your Muse. Splendid!