Midnight Thoughts

Will tomorrow ever come?

Midnight Thoughts

My scarlet love

Wont you rundown?

My darkest desire

Wont you come out?

My hidden secret

Wont you repeat it?

My fallen trust

Wont you crush

me under your thumb

and love me until i'm all done

Don't abandon me

for i'm so young 

but don't believe tomorrow will ever come

Author's Note

Thanks for reading

Reviews

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there is a darkness permeating your words... the flow of blood exposes the dark desire to free pain by cutting (maybe) and losing trust which has crushed your spirit threatens to leave you but despite you not believing that tomorrow will come, you ask that fallen trust to stay... dark and lonely is the plea... very good writing, Ella

[Ella]

You can see right through me. Thank you for reading and liking my poetry. It really does mean a lot to me.

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Sometimes others understand us... you are welcome, Ella :)

[Ella]

I didn't think anyone would figure it out, was it that obvious?

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No, I don't think it was obvious and while it was my first thought, I read the piece a few times before reviewing... maybe it's because I am very familiar with the act of cutting and those who cut...you obviously left clues but like lots of cases some people will get them and others will miss them... it is a very well-written piece and i love the way you deal with the issue...it is very clever :)

[Ella]

Thank you very much. Again i am glad you can read in between the lines and picked up on the clues. I feel the need to say sorry because no one should have to be familiar with it.

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Don't apologize...it happened before you even knew what it was and it will happen long after you are gone (which I hope is a long, long time away)...writing about it and putting it out there will provide strength to those who still hide it... what you are doing is creating awareness and that is a good thing

[Ella]

Thank you i never really thought about it that way.

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:D.....I guess we should be thanking you!!

[Ella]

No need to thank me for anything. Its my pleasure really.

[emipoemi]

Besides your absence of apostrophes in your "wont"s, you've written something grand here. A lot of juicy lines and an absolutely spine-chilling, but killer ending! Well freaking done!

[Intravenousexpressions]

Simple diction, vibrant approach. =)

[Ella]

Thank you (:

[Andrew Rayne]

Another elegant piece. I like the message between the lines that comes out. Not the obvious one, but the little fine emotions laces in between the imagery. It was a fine read and I really enjoyed it. :) You're a good writer.

[Ella]

Thank you so much. I try to put as much of myself in each poem as i can.

[Andrew Rayne]

It shows. :)

[Jordan]

Much better, and more coherent, than my midnight thoughts.

I like it. I can't explain what about it or why, but I like it. That may be because this is a midnight review, though. Not being able to explain, not liking it that is.

I don't know how to english right now.

Point is, 8/8 stars.

[Ella]

Thanks for liking and reading it. Midnight thoughts (or reviews) are always the best because they tend to be more truthful. Thanks again!

[Robert]

I feel a sense of loneliness in this piece with nobody to call your own. The ending is very sad not thinking that there will be a tomorrow or not having any hope for a tomorrow. I say there will be a tomorrow and it is one that may change your life forever. Hope has a funny way of showing up when you least expect it and something new and unexpected may become a gift to you when you need it most.

[Ella]

I really do hope so.

[Robert]

See you do have hope. It will, trust

[EileenM]

It is the darkest secret - I've kept this one as well. I admire the eloquence with which you express your secret and your pain, and most of all your shame. It's all very subtle, but if you've been there, you can see it.

Keep writing. You have talent. And please find a way to share your secret before it's too late.

[Ella]

Thank you for your amazing review. Its nice to know you enjoyed reading this and were able to relate to it. I hope i will

[Pushkar Prabhat]

this is very dark.......and powerful.......
very smart for poetic perceptions.......
we feel an urge to express ourselves on paper......when we find no one near us capable of understanding us......or qualified enough to share secrets with.........
but we sure do feel insecure.......vulnerable........because.....most people just try to judge us,.....and not comfort us.......such confidant can be found easily in poetry......(your secrets are safe)........you are lucky to have that talent....

amazing write.....
i loved it!!!
:)

[Ella]

Thank you so much it means a lot. No need to flatter me, its not really a talent. But thank you for seeing it as one. I enjoy reading your reviews!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome.........and poetry is a talent........to be proud of......!!! :) :)

[Ella]

Thanks again. I don't think im as good as you think i am but i appreciate it a lot :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

that is good.........since that help us to get better.......it was my pleasure!!! :) :)