Did It Ever Cross Your Mind

Breaking up with your first

Have you ever thought about how many laws I broke to runaway with you?

Did you ever stop to think that I wasted a year and half on you?

Have you ever considered that I sacrificed my innocent soul just for you?

Did it ever cross your mind that I love you?

Have you ever thought about how many battles I fought for you?

Did you ever stop to think that Sobhi is my favorite teddy bear? Coz it’s from you.

Have you ever considered that I will be crying for four consecutive days over you?

Did it ever cross your mind that, maybe, Just maybe, I love you?

Have you ever thought about how many times I obsessed about you?

Did you ever stop to think that I always came back to you?

Have you ever considered how many cookies I baked with love for you?

Did it ever cross your mind that I still love you?

Have you ever thought about how I changed for you?

Did you ever stop to think that I never felt anything to anyone but you?

Have you ever considered the effort I put to make every moment count for me and you?

Did it ever cross your mind that you love me too?

Author's Note

Reviews please! I want to know the good and the bad about every poem I write.

Reviews

[Kathleen Burlas]

Lovely poem. I can really relate into this :)) Well written. Full of love and emotions.

[LogoDaedalus]

Very effective style here -- the repetition of the phrases at the beginnings of the lines (called "anaphora" for anyone who likes knowing that sort of thing), and the consistent alternation between "Have you ever / Did you ever," provides a great, lyrical framework for the list of great and small expressions of love, and the twist in the final line is all the more forlorn in asking for some reciprocation of love, because of how uniformly every other line in the poem has expressed love going in one direction.
Compared to your later poems, your control of meter is a little faltering -- uneven lines are fine, but the stress on the syllables is somewhat unplanned, and doesn't carry the momentum of the poem. But, again, that's in comparison to your more recent works, so it's an area you've clearly improved in since writing this.

[Octob3r Star]

That was very sweet. I'm happy I read this. :) Cheers

[Alex Vidmar]

Make the font any smaller much??? Damn! love it.

[♥ Kinnixk]

I can definantly relate to this...i really liked this poem; I like the repitition.

[Zachary_James]

I can completely relate ton this, love this... Great work

[The White Wolf]

Breaking up with your first love is always difficult. And no, people rarely think of anything but their own emotions, well, most of the time, but especially during a breakup. A set of very heartfelt questions.

[Madeline]

Very emotional and beautiful. I really liked this poem. :)

[Wolf]

Love your poem! It's so beautiful.
The only thing that isn't ok is the size of the text. It's a bit too small and for some readers it can be hard to read.
Except for the size of the text, your poem is great!

[StephanieDenise]

I love it! I really enjoyed the last line in every part was re-stressed & carrying the same point through the poem! great job!