WRITERS AND POETS

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Nicely done. Succinctly said. And it's stuff like this that gets you in hot water with the over sensitive types -- lol.:)

[Relic]

Thanks KL. :)

[DoormanDan]

You and I have similar thoughts, my friend. Personally, I don't care if I'm able to fully comprehend a poem or story as long as long as I believe it to have passion and effort put into it. That is the case with many pieces on this site, which does make me glad to be a part of this community (even though I'm not all that active here). That quote in this piece's picture is really cool. I'll be sure to remember that one! You're last four lines made me chuckle a bit, especially the last two, as they are all too true for me as well. Your presentation and organization for this piece are wonderful, Relic. May you and the rest of us keep on writing! :)

[Relic]

Thanks very much for your kind word Dan. :)

[Sheila Kline]

Ah, with pen in hand, a desire to create something a bit different, and the desire to write embedded deep within my spirit, I take your sage advice and search the corners of my mind to deliver, to learn from others, and once again present the results of my efforts so that others may read.

To review, or not to review is, as always, left to the reader. I fear being a selfish author who writes to help me deal with some sort of life problem, but also with the intent of always helping another release a bit of their pain by identifying with mine.

Your presentation, meter, format yield a combined excellent rating!
And kudos to Richard for helping you with the meter!

[Relic]

Your reviews are always great Shiela, thanks.

[Relic]

Whoops, I meant Sheila. :)

[Sheila Kline]

No problem Tim. I've been called worse........LOL

[William Liston]

This is a very enjoyable piece with the perfect balance of humor, irony, and wit. It's capable of making anyone laugh. I'm glad Richard helped you with the meter because I loved the flow of this piece; the rhymes naturally fell into place and nothing sounded forced. The meter also compliments the somewhat comedic, light-hearted feel to this poem as well ... it kinda read like a limerick.

My only critique is in the second line of the second stanza, the first word does not need to be capitalized.

Other than that, I thought this was great. You have a nice sense of humor.

- William Liston

[Relic]

Thank you very much, William. :)

[Girl With A Pen]

"Then, when you're through, I'll share a word or two,
If not, then it's probably crap.'"

This made me laugh. I suppose it's because that's how I am when it comes to my writing. I'll only show what I don't think is "crap". I write a lot, but don't always like what I write and refuse to show it to others, fearing it not being good enough. Thanks for sharing this

[Relic]

Check out what I wrote in my status yesterday. You're not alone my friend. Thank you.

[Bear]

Interesting perspective, striving for originality in written words to stand in judgement of worthiness. So true that everything one writes is evaluated by everyone who reads it, looking to either appreciate and learn or debase with criticism. Your poem is just dark enough for me to enjoy the realism of your words and intent, I will have to check out more of your work.

[Bear]

Oh, sorry I did not read about you till I found your other word no longer published. Sorry to see you pulling your work before I had the chance to read more than this one poem. I read what you had to say about ShadowWhysper's poem she wrote for me and followed your link to here. I would have commented more on your poem content and the witty approach you took but now it just sounds tripe. Anyway should you decide to repost any of your work please let me know, I wish you luck in where ever and what ever you do and write.

[Relic]

Thank you Bear.

[Cory Barrett]

I have written so, so, so much crap.

[Relic]

I'm still writing so so so much crap myself. :)

[Cory Barrett]

Well cheers to all that crap!

[Relic]

...........Cheers!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes accidentally we use phrases that have appeared before, but sometimes it is intentional...again love this piece...and will be really sorry to not see you around---i have always enjoyed your work, my friend....you know that.

j.

[Relic]

I appreciate that Jacob. I'll always be around, I'm just not posting. Maybe next year. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree.
"Learn from others, as you work to the bone;
refuse any rest or a nap.
Then, when you're through, I will comment to you,
If not, then it's probably crap."
Life is learning. To become a great writer. Must test life, swim in s**t and not be afraid to write the truth. Thank you my friend for sharing your words and thoughts.
Coyote

[Relic]

Thanks very much.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha! This just made me hoot with laughter. It is a crisp, fast paced piece filled with sardonic wit!

[Relic]

Thanks very much John.