A bird overheard

A Poem by Relic

Upon this path - where winter greets

a footpath walker's stride

a robin's voice affects me so

for what I hear implied.

He echoes language through the woods

in words no man can say.

Ensnaring thus my downcast soul

to turn my thoughts his way.

I'm curious if his pensive plea

was borne from some unrest

for one departed from his life

now gone to heaven's nest?

I know I'll never understand

orations from the glen -

but when my heart renews anew

That's when I'll try again.

© 2025 Relic

Author's Note

Sometimes people seek solace through nature, wondering if by some small chance it relates to their pain.

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CaptainBill

As is usual with good poetry, you see deeper when you look again. "Glide - stride " works. 'my metered stride' was a distracting image at first. Now I see a good image, with a double reference, to walking in the glen and your metered writing of this poem.

I have trouble at the idea level with the second stanza. First line and 'serenade' is a nice image. Shifting to "hymns" is where I have trouble. If this is where you were going, you gave no hint in the first bird melodies, or any bird song, actually. 'No man conveys' seems to be there just for the rhyme, and that stands out. You have to think about the meaning of 'conveys' for a long time, before you can get a meaning that makes sense. At least I did. So your chosen words distract from the image you are building. The same with 'praise'. I see a possible meaning, but I have to work at it. The actual rhyme is just fine. It is the work you have to do to get the meaning. Some artists might want exactly that.

Others have said, so I didn't before. I do like your poem.

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Thanks for clarifying that. I will think about what you've said. In the future I'll think about a po.. read more

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Acron 4

outstanding poetry, I was reminded of the solitary reaper by wordsworth............wonderful...........thanks for sharing.

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13 Years Ago

Thank you very much Ron.

Frieda P

This is a truly magical read, love it! Can't say more, it's simply beautiful.

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13 Years Ago

I appreciate the kind words Frieda, thanks.

13 Years Ago

My pleasure, I'm glad I noticed this one come up...it was a little nugget of candy for my soul.

13 Years Ago

Glad you enjoyed it.

Neva Flores Smith - Cha..

absolutely wonderful poetry

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Thank you Neva.

The Rock And Roll Cowbo..

If nature teaches us one thing it is that things die but there will always be new growth ahead. Nicely done.

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13 Years Ago

Thank you Dale.

Sami Khalil

As Autumn ends, the answer fades...
Nice write.

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13 Years Ago

Thank you very much.

13 Years Ago

You are welcome.

Doreen

This brings about wonderful images. It flows nicely when read. Very nice read.

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Thank you Doreen.

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I've been an amateur scribbler since 2009. You can also find me on Stars Rite under my real name Tim. Many of those poems are from this account. more..