The glowing light. (rhyme poem)

The yellow sunlight ~ bright and warm

crawled one morning on my bedroom floor

was sluggish as a sleeper stretching his form

creep~creep~creeping to the bedroom door.

Then, after knowing it could not stay

from the glowing chair, it seemed to say 

'life is a light that flickers away

doused by demise through speed or decay

Soon, the light faded under the door

replaced by a darkness ~ yet all the more

the yellow sunlight, as though by lure

departed somewhere ~ but to where ~ I'm not sure

~Pausing to ponder the sadness of such a short existence for the day, the sun slipped into the unknown of the darkness. Just as we too will depart one day to somewhere, after our light on this earth has finally faded.~

Reviews

[Kenaz]

I have thought it over a hundred times. I have come to the conclusion that if life is short and death is finite then there has to be some reason for dying. Maybe there is an afterlife, maybe we are reborn, etc...the point is that perhaps this life is not our only one. Stars are born and they die, but they never truly disappear. We are all made of this star stuff and we play a part in shaping other stars as well. With a universe so infinite, literally everything is possible. I believe that life is infinite.

[Relic]

Everyone needs something to believe in...
Thank you for a great review.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

where does the light go after it shines on us? where do we go after we absorb the light and go into the shadows?

this reminds me much of the cold hard fact that from the moment of birth we begin to die...i guess it is what we do with the light while we have it.

E.A. Poe-ish here..like the shadowy feel of it.

[Relic]

I like your review Jacob, thanks.

[Frontier]

That rhyming in the last stanza is real good. I also like the theme of sunlight and darkness.

[Relic]

Thanks Frontier. :)

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Very lovely, I had to read this multiple times and let the images and concept wash over my mind...sinuously scripted...I adored the idea of light, as life, filtering in and illuminating a short existence. In the grand scheme of things, it does feel like we exists briefly to depart somewhere, unknown. Watching all forms of life go through stages of atrophy at different rates makes me all the more aware that we have to make this time count, make each and every breath significant. Thank you for that reminder today. Such a beautiful poem, Relic, I always enjoy your work.

[Relic]

Thanks for a great review K.

[Chance]

beautifully written. Somber, morbidly romantic and decadent, describing the decay of life. I love the symbolism. You bring such life to death...beautiful.

[Relic]

I appreciate your review, thanks.

[Firestone Feinberg]

You are most welcome. --D

[Robert Strzalko]

It's a good title and the line "Life is like a light that flickers away" really caught my attention. Together they create a strong mood and impression.

[Relic]

Thank you.

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Really interesting poem! The imagery here is lovely and the rhyme scheme creates a great flow. Your writing is a treat to read!

[Relic]

Thank you very much Nathaniel.

[David Scott]

We all have seen the light creep into the room. The warm light is a comfort indeed.
We all have felt our skin cool as the light slips away as well...
Here is the quality of your write. A common thought written in an uncommon way. The ideas stretched and expanded in one line and pressed tighter in a grasping need in another line.

Thank you for creating this poetry. I enjoyed your work very much.

[Relic]

Thanks so much David. I appreciate your thoughts.

[Nix]

A quietly profound piece. One that brings both despair and hope to the reader. Very well written.

[Relic]

Thanks very much.

[Tina Louise UK]

Peaceful beauty, such a relaxing read...really enjoyed :) x

[Relic]

Thanks, glad you enjoyed it Tia.