The glowing light. (rhyme poem)

The yellow sunlight ~ bright and warm

crawled one morning on my bedroom floor

was sluggish as a sleeper stretching his form

creep~creep~creeping to the bedroom door.

Then, after knowing it could not stay

from the glowing chair, it seemed to say 

'life is a light that flickers away

doused by demise through speed or decay

Soon, the light faded under the door

replaced by a darkness ~ yet all the more

the yellow sunlight, as though by lure

departed somewhere ~ but to where ~ I'm not sure

~Pausing to ponder the sadness of such a short existence for the day, the sun slipped into the unknown of the darkness. Just as we too will depart one day to somewhere, after our light on this earth has finally faded.~

Reviews

[Kenaz]

I have thought it over a hundred times. I have come to the conclusion that if life is short and death is finite then there has to be some reason for dying. Maybe there is an afterlife, maybe we are reborn, etc...the point is that perhaps this life is not our only one. Stars are born and they die, but they never truly disappear. We are all made of this star stuff and we play a part in shaping other stars as well. With a universe so infinite, literally everything is possible. I believe that life is infinite.

[Relic]

Everyone needs something to believe in...
Thank you for a great review.

[Michelle N. H.]

The birth and death of the day through sunlight and the darkness of night that consumes it. I love how you balance the everlasting circle of nature and human life. To me, it's as if your words propose a hope for rebirth through an uncertainty of the unknown. It's beautiful.

[Relic]

Thanks so much Michelle for reading and the review.

[Edwina]

I love it. Great style. Revisions are good.

[Relic]

Thank you Edwina.

[EloisaWrites]

Wow. This is very descriptive and though the picture you paint with words seem simple, it makes a lot of meanings; it may be that dream we chase, the love we have, the inspiration we keep, or according to your notes, our very existence. On my faves! :)

[Relic]

Thank you very much.

[Laminators Dubai]

this is a sunny and lively write for me...
thanks for sharing^^

[Relic]

Thanks for reading Glitch.

[Night]

I've read hundreds of poems about the thin balance between life and death, but never one so clearly written. Somehow I feel that the vivid picture you've painted is a lot more impacting than a vague shape of an abyss. I loved it!

[Relic]

I'm so thankful you liked it Night. I appreciate the kind words.

[Night]

You are very welcome!

[Adambomb]

You have expressed words to the feeling I've always had with my back to the window staring at my closed door as the shadow grows larger and larger and the light grows dimmer and dimmer. Great poem!

[Relic]

Thanks very much Adambomb.

[Adambomb]

It's my pleasure. I enjoyed this very much.

[MOON]

Simple yet deep emotions , the light disappearing from our lives.

[Relic]

Thanks for reading Moon.

[MsJewel]

Fabulous writing. So many lines worth remembering...you write with depth and emotion. I admire that very much.

:) Julie

[Relic]

Thanks very much Julie.

[Adam Wolf]

'Sluggish as a sleeper stretching his form'
I know this isn't the focal point of this poem, but I wanted to single it out because it evoked a very strong visual. Very nicely worded. Now the image of a man in a dimly lit room stretching amidst sleep is stuck in my mind like a song. Thanks...or damn you...I'm not sure which. : )

[Relic]

haha, It's almost bed time for me so you've brought up the image to me too. Damn you! lol Thanks very much, glad you liked it Adam.