The gypsy-like leaves (rhyme poem)

They flee and fly like jostling birds -

or gray moths 'round a light.

They pirouette in lazy rings -

while frolicking in flight.

Like gypsies, leaves will soon depart

with tender thoughts for wind

Soon to sweep and persevere -

in lives undisciplined.

Some will scurry in their haste

to pester pine trees praying.

Then, they'll sit, for just a bit -

In fields where I was laying.

Reviews

[Light and ashes]

I read this out loud, and how beautiful it sounds rolling off the tongue! As soon as I read the first verse I realized that I was hooked and falling in love. That experience did not leave me until the end.

[Relic]

~ That's so kind of you, Light. Thanks very much for the read.

[Light and ashes]

You're welcome, it was very much worth it.

[andrew mitchell]

A lovely swirling write Relic, a pleasure to read and end rhymes add the perfect flow without being forced.

[Relic]

Thanks very much, andrew.

[Eugi]

Beautiful! I love the visual and this takes me to a nice peaceful place.

[Relic]

Thank you, Eugi.

[Eugi]

My pleasure.

[Cynthia umunna]

Wow
This is good.
It has stirred thoughts

[Relic]

I appreciate your review. Thanks.

[poetgurl]

WOW!! This is so good, I just loved the imagery you write with. This is so poetic as well. Awesome write here.

[Relic]

You're so kind, thanks, Kimmie.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Relic... since I am truly a Gypsy... I found your
poem fascinating. I love "to pester praying pines".
We gypsies do persevere, however we can be a bit
undisciplined. My father's heritage is Hungarian...
They came here via The Statue of Liberty.

[Relic]

Wow...thanks very much for the review, Patricia.

[barleygirl]

This is a great way to show the dynamic life of falling leaves! I was very taken in by your dynamic descriptions with a touch of personification, as if the leaves (as a whole) have a personality you're painting here. There's also a hint of allegory, as far as some people possibly being like these leaves, only gracing one's field for a brief season of time (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[kentuck14]

Like the images you use in this piece. especially the 2nd stanza. Nice one, relic.
T.

[Relic]

I appreciate the reviews, thanks.

[Samuel Dickens]

There's never a time too late or too early to write about glorious autumn. The thought of them falling on where I lie is delightful.

[Relic]

Thanks very much, Sam. :)