The gypsy-like leaves (rhyme poem)

They flee and fly like jostling birds -

or gray moths 'round a light.

They pirouette in lazy rings -

while frolicking in flight.

Like gypsies, leaves will soon depart

with tender thoughts for wind

Soon to sweep and persevere -

in lives undisciplined.

Some will scurry in their haste

to pester pine trees praying.

Then, they'll sit, for just a bit -

In fields where I was laying.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'The gypsy-like leaves'
Relic,
Oh this was mesmerizing. I allowed my imagination to run with the wind and the amber leaves of Autumn. This was fun to read as it allows the reader to see how you feel and enter into your surroundings. I like that.
Kathy

[Relic]

Thanks so much, Kathy.

[Ken Simm.]

What a simply lovely piece. I love the metaphor.

[Relic]

Thank you, Ken.

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Tim! 🍂
Even if the poem were not brilliantly, beautifully, soul-fetchingly rendered, that picture would have made the trip here well worth the effort, and what a thought-provoking, adventurously spirited title … I love it!
And, what could be more magically image-laden than:

"They flee and fly like jostling birds -
or gray moths 'round a light.
To pirouette in lazy rings -
while frolicking in flight."

One of my faves, My Friend … immensely enjoyed penmanship in spot-on rhymes and easy flow.
Thank you for the morning treat! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Relic]

Thanks so much for you encouraging words, Richard. :)

[Richard🖌]

Anything for a friend.

[Relic]

………………………. :)

[Susan 🦋]

Awwwww loving the imagery and now I want to go outside for a walk! ....praying pine tree? Wonderful! :-)

[Relic]

Thank you, Susan.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

“Leaves -like gypsies - ..slip away”- superb vision and simile Relic. The “flee and fly” flow of your graceful verses take us on an autumnal odyssey of wandering , pirouetting leaves in all their blazing majesty. Your cadence and rhyme make them dance in front of our appreciative eyes. Thank you for this lovely journey my friend.

[Relic]

Thanks so much for your thoughts, Annette.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You’re very welcome.

[Beccy]

Lovely lines; harks back to the age of the Romantics; every verse sublime and absolutely my kind of poetry

Beccy.

[Relic]

I appreciate your review, Beccy. Thank you. :)

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

I love this very carefree
and free spirited feel to
it. 👏👏


Leaves - like gypsies -
slip away
with a fondness for the wind.
Soon to sweep and persevere -
in lives undisciplined.

[Relic]

Thanks very much, Benita.

[Laura Kate]

This is beautiful, I can relate to the fondness for the wind and being swept away undisciplined. Really lovely.

[Relic]

Thank you very much, Laura.

[Sarah K Cass]

What a beautiful image to accompany your poem. Your words conjur up for me breezy Autumn days and swirls of crispy leaves. Lovely.

[Relic]

Thanks very much for your thoughtful review, Amber.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lovely depiction of something we rarely value as spent leaves meander chaotically and randomly across the land to wedge neath hedge and 'tween pots where on the ground they rot!

[Relic]

Well said, John. Thank you.