Paper fish

A variation on another poem I wrote.

With metallic clouds,

darkness gathers.

From the tumbling sky,

my shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil

and gutters clatter,

while bullfrogs assert:

What does it matter?

The vat in the sky is now released

to soggy sidewalks and mirrored streets.

And neon lights flaunt lucent streaks.

Had water been wine, could I serve a feast?

For today,

I compare myself to a corporate fish

whose shoes go squeak

and swoosh and swish

near buildings that sit

like sunken ships.

So I'll mop up my misery

and swim away

through chlorinated walkways

this wet Wednesday.

It's down to a drizzle,

though come what may,

I'm a sidewalk fish

in this city today.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

So wonderful poem my dear friend. A gran story in the poetry.
"So I'll mop up memories and swim away
From the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday."
The above lines. The statement, I could write a epic tale from. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Relic]

Thanks for your great review, Coyote.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Rye]

This is so good, very powerful.
I love the rhyme scheme and the flow.
Very nicely written and very creative.
love the pic.

[Relic]

Thank you, Rye. :)

[Rye]

not a problem

[Carola]

great rhyming & rhythm. wonderful individual story lines.
"Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks" i love it. 👍

[Relic]

Thanks very much, Carola.

[Catherine Donavon]

Delightful - both the poem and the wonderful graphic. I felt like I was walking through the city in the rain. Great imagery!

[Relic]

Thanks very much, Catherine.

[ANB]

I love this one. You created such an interesting, surreal world and a feeling of being in a city but slightly off pace and out of touch, very relatable. And of course, the image is beautiful and perfect for this piece. I feel almost honoured by your kind words on my attempt at poetry now that I see your writing :)

[Relic]

That's very kind of you to say. You're very talented. Thank you for the review.

[Stella Armour]

Do you know Relic, all that screams at me is "Dahli".

This poem and picture are so wonderfully surreal i think your muse has artist links :)

[Relic]

Well, that link must have gotten rusty than. lol :)
Thanks so much, Stella.

[Stella Armour]

Was different , made me sit up and take notice +(*_*)+

[Chris Shaw]

I love your posted image. So interesting to look at, especially the size of that underwater monster in comparison to the distant ship. Strong visuals of a wet day on Manhattan's streets. I like, "near buildings that sit like their sunken ships". And you turning into a paper fish on a wet sidewalk. Nicely composed.

Chris

[Relic]

Thanks so much, Chris. :)

[Mary Jo. Clare]

Wow, I don't even have words. This poem is all too fantastic! From the rhyming scheme to the imagery, well done Relic, well done!

[Relic]

Thanks so much, Mary.

[LazerRays]

this reminds me of the book paper towns by John green. The girl in it, Margo, is this kinda rebellious girl withyhis philosophy. She hates normal lives, just to be anoter face in the crowd. She tells the boy, quinn at te top of a tower to look at the paper people in a paper town. That it's all pretty from a distance but it's only ever paper. That's one of my favorite books and I enjoyed seeing a reminder of it in this poem :)

[Relic]

Thanks, Sarah.

[angel]

Life underwater seems a bit on the nose today;it's so humid...that cool water would be refreshing, though,and I feel a bit better just thinking about that.
Nice images, lovely feel.

[Relic]

I hate humidity. :) Thanks for reading angel.