Paper fish

A variation on another poem I wrote.

With metallic clouds,

darkness gathers.

From the tumbling sky,

my shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil

and gutters clatter,

while bullfrogs assert:

What does it matter?

The vat in the sky is now released

to soggy sidewalks and mirrored streets.

And neon lights flaunt lucent streaks.

Had water been wine, could I serve a feast?

For today,

I compare myself to a corporate fish

whose shoes go squeak

and swoosh and swish

near buildings that sit

like sunken ships.

So I'll mop up my misery

and swim away

through chlorinated walkways

this wet Wednesday.

It's down to a drizzle,

though come what may,

I'm a sidewalk fish

in this city today.

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

How delicate the language movement, a contrast to the bursting colour images that spring forth while reading this piece, well done, good read.

[Relic]

I thank you for reading. :)

[Shannon]

I tend to read things are darker than they are. I see the beauty of the cityscape in a storm. But the paper fish brings to mind something out of place, perhaps fragile.

[Relic]

Precisely. Thank you.

[L.C. Jarrette]

wow...lovely poem.i was smiling the whole time i was reading it.it's just amazing. i'm really glad i joined this site. i'm even more inspired to do better.

[Relic]

I'm glad to hear that, thank you.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The opening line is a draw as it provokes imagination with its novel concept and the descriptions in metaphor give the impression of a wet, drenched city during a storm. Very expressive and colourful.

[Relic]

Thank you for the reviews.

[Katerina Grev]

I really love the imagery behind your words, as well as incorporating parts of nature in your feelings. Fantastic job, great read.

[Relic]

You're so kind, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Relic,

I put your ideations into the supreme beings lexicon because I'm sure (careful I'm using gender here) He would enjoy the s**t out of them!

regards,
al

[Relic]

lol, thanks very much Alfred.

[Raven Moonchild]

(applauds) I love this poem. Such fantastic detail. :)

[Relic]

I appreciate the read thanks.

[Alyscia]

I really loved the rhythm you were able to establish

[Relic]

Thank you Alyscia. :)

[Allie]

Wonderful read, very creative imagery and wordplay, fascinating!

[Relic]

I appreciate the comment Allie, thanks. :)

[SJ Mullins]

Wonderful analogy, imagery, words, shall i keep going? You should keep writing, and you should definitely be published! Brilliant!