Two separate trains

Long days at work often lead to daydreaming ~ do they not?

From two separate motionless trains

their eyes met.  

From two separate departing trains

their eyes embraced.  

On two separate moving trains  

they dreamed of a stranger  

in their arms.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Amy R]

Daydreaming? I think we all appreciate this sometimes.
I liked this, just imagine how powerful our eyes are, we can say so much with one glance,, silent but powerful.
Nice write. thanks for sharing.
-Amy

[Relic]

Thanks so much for the comment, Amy. :)

[Amy R]

You're welcome 😊

[Thomas W Case]

The longing, the loneliness, the hunger for touch and humanity are well conveyed.

[Relic]

Thank you for the comment, Thomas.

[RomaJ]

Hi Tim. this poem is wonderfully concise. I love how you capture the fleeting, almost cinematic connection between two strangers, using the movement of the trains to mirror the tension between distance and intimacy. The repetition of ‘separate trains’ emphasizes both longing and possibility, and the final line leaves a sweet, lingering sense of what might have been. It is elegant in its simplicity.

[Relic]

Thank you, Romaj.

[Chris Shaw]

It was nice to revisit this poem after five years Tim. You captured a moment of fantasy beautifully. Trains passing in the station. Visually beautiful.

Chris

[Relic]

Thanks very much, Chris. :)

[Renata]

This could represent a perfect picture of my daily life. Trains, trains and more trains…..and the many strangers that share the rides. It’s fair to say that stolen glances happen in astounding numbers in such daily journeys. You can sense the eyes on you sometimes and usually when your own eyes are fixated on someone else. It’s when those trains start to roll that any moments of fantasy or possibility disappear into smoke.
Such a relatable image for me and yes, I may be classified as being guilty of engaging in such incidences of wandering eyes!

39 reviews! I see what you mean’t by better days gone by here now!

[Relic]

I always appreciate your comments, Ranata. Thanks for the comment and understanding. I too have had some wandering eyes in the past on trains. :)

[mou]

"Long days at work often lead to daydreaming ~ do they not? "
- I love this daydreaming.
The innocence, beauty and hope that a heart can hold! Lovely poem
- mou

[Relic]

I appreciate your thoughts, mou. Thank you.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Two separate trains have derailed in Ohio in the last month. I've never been on a train except an old steam locomotive as a kid. I used to think they were sort of romantic. I enjoyed this. Who knows what fantasies are born in railways stations and airports? It's an interesting question. Well done.

[Relic]

I've scribbled one on Palastine. Thanks for the comment, Fabian. :)

[MomzillaNC]

So lovely and mournfully wistful.

[Relic]

Thanks for your thoughts on this one, MomzillaNC. Much appreciated.

[MomzillaNC]

yvw 😎

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

It's funny how the mind travels. We can often hear the glances that we think are silent.

I really like this.

[Relic]

Thanks for the comment, Linda. Your comments are much appreciated. :)

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

My pleasure.