Two separate trains

Long days at work often lead to daydreaming ~ do they not?

From two separate motionless trains

their eyes met.  

From two separate departing trains

their eyes embraced.  

On two separate moving trains  

they dreamed of a stranger  

in their arms.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Instant attraction, but how sad. Never to meet. So much feeling in this short poem of couplets. Strong imagery and filled with the longing of romance. Nicely done Tim.

Chris

[Relic]

THanks, Chris.

[Einstein Noodle]

poignant and wondrous ... put me self in the train with ease .. waiting to disembark .. catching that magical connected glance .. as she pulls out in another direction .. well done! so enjoyed the scene you set up ... really admire the precise use of the language ... couplets work perfectly ... simple .. direct .. so relateable ... glances across work stations and the trains pull out ... from across grocery isles and again .. the trains pull out ... makes me think of desperate love as the hero jumps off and gives chase .. only to just miss boarding ;) nice one ... puts me in a daydream :)
E.

[Relic]

Thanks so much for the review, Einstein.

[Patricia Wedel]

Reminds me of the Movie "North by Northwest with
Cary Grant and Eva Marie Saint... nice Valentine Poem.
truly, Pat

[Relic]

Thank you for the review, Patricia.