The eyes.

Reading

the eyes 

~

having found words

hover like bumble bees,

~

feed

~

then fly away.

Reviews

[Miss Sharon]

Short but powerful writing my friend! Well done. ~Sharon

[Relic]

Thank you, Sharon.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I love this one...short and powerful.
maybe better if they don't find words, then they may hover longer...and get too attached to fly.
j.

[Relic]

That's a good thought. Thanks, J.

[Light and ashes]

Utterly brilliant, 100.....

[Relic]

Thanks very much, l&a

[Light and ashes]

You're welcome :)

[Chris Shaw]

A very meaningful piece of brevity Tim. Yes, the eyes are like that when it comes to words. We hover, alight, feed and then flyaway.

Chris

[Relic]

Thanks for the comment, Chris.

[Allen Smuckler]

Don't know if you meant to, but this poem is a classic example of Tanka poetry... Not based on syllables necessarily...but by meaning, style and essence. Haikus, Tankas, and Senyrus don't follow the traditional definition anymore, anyway. Excellent write no matter what we call it. Well done.

[Relic]

Thanks so much, Allen. I wrote it in about ten minutes after thinking about it for 20 minutes with no intention to write anything other than what it is. :)

[Allen Smuckler]

well it came out terrific ... sometimes our best writes just flow ... wish they all did.

[Relic]

So do I. ha My thanks.

[Cherrie]

I like notion of the reader hovering over the work, taking in all that is set before them.

[Relic]

Thanks for reading, Cherrie.

[Cherrie]

:) Your welcome it's always enjoyable to read your work.

[Relic]

Thanks. :)