Ice

Needs a lot of work and adding to it just a draft for now

I feel the cold on the highest peaks
Ice wrapped around my frozen heart
Stone cold eyes gazing
I find myself gazing at you
Your warmth begins to surround me
Like an open fire on a winter night

Author's Note

Just a draft needs adding to... Any suggestions?

Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

Beautifully captured essence of what someone means to you. I think the last line is fine, but it always helps to look at it with fresh eyes after a day or two.

[Heart of gold]

Thank you very much

[Heart of gold]

Yes I wasn't sure about the last line either , thanks for the review much appreciated

[Insight "MH"]

This is a fine write, true and honest feelings in every line.

I suggest a small editing to the last line : "Like an open fire on a winter's night" it is up to you, i may be wrong suggesting that ^_^