My Will.

Bore into me the strength
You promised to give
So I could remain alive
To love you till I passed.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

The comments are right, this is gorgeous. Four lines saying exactly what need to be said, and nothing more. The craftsmanship here is amazing. The only critique I could give, is selfishly, I'd like to see more; but it doesn't need more. Excellent stuff.

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

Thank you dear, for the read and review. Further along in the comments there are collaborations on it, which I most enjoy reread ing, but yes, everything is said and Never done with the four lines above.

[Buniheart]

Very short - but well articulated! I love the dark edginess to it. Some poems sometimes go overboard with this theme, but frankly i think you nailed.

[Angel Bluestocking]

simple and short. i love the impact of the message behind the words of your poem. wonderful write~!!

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Awwwwwwwwww:) I love it!!!!!!! I hope that my fiancee can do that for me, then again, he kinda already has, so I totally get this:) Great work!!!!!!!!

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

This is very good, short and simple but absolutly beautiful!

[Emerald Seas]

Nicely penned. Such a deep writing with so few words. It does speak volumes.

[khalid]

we all need that will. we all have it but sometimes it is missed. very nicely penned. i liked the metaphor and similarities of will as an outer force..

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

This is true. And I thank you for your time to read this ink.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lovely and so well put together in 20 words!
It is poignant and has balance and pathos.

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

Thank you for the read ^^ and review :)

[Dalia]

short and expressive
nice

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

Thank you for the read as well as the review :)

[Dalia]

welcome :)

[Annabelle Lee]

beautiful.

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

:) Many thanks for the read