Defeat

Rain falls

For no man

So surely

It does not fall for me.

Tired I tried...

You tired of me.

The blood flows

Like the drops of rain

And puddles at my feet.

Author's Note

Love the rain!

Reviews

[charleybear]

short but powerful. For me it conjured up sweet images but then a brutal flash of reality. very nice :)

[*~Poetic_Essence~*]

Powerful write..you say alot with such short words, but the meaning of this entire poem is direct. I love the rain but i hate thunder..lol i am terrified of it..but i love lightining..lol i know what your probably thinking, why would like the one that can actually kill you..its an ongoing question that I ask myself..but that is all irrelevant, i loved this poem...

Well From One Word-Play Poet To The Next...Always Remember To Write With Your Heart!

[The Message]

I love this poem! You say you hate rigid meter, I say you do a damn fine job without it.

[Sean Eddingfield]

A little sweetness and a little vicera... a delightful combination. Great work!

[Thunderlyrics]

Love the rain too...and the poem just sets the right mood of utter defeat!