Fortunate To Be

"Fortunate To Be... part 1.0"

Dark.

Barren,

Of the soul

That I let

Them rip from me.

This poet screams

Words

That cannot be heard.

Cries

That match the lies

You told:

As you vehemently say

You love me...

Cold hearted

A*s-hole

May you want

For everything,

And get

Nothing.

For it is all

You deserve.

Liar,

Look me in the eyes

And promise me

It won't happen again...

She means nothing to you?

If that is so...

Then were do I stand.

This Poet

Does not understand

This man

Who caresses

With the strike of a snake

June 9th 2009

 

 

 

"Fortunate To Be... part 1.1"

She screams words

That cannot be heard

And cries because of

The lies you told...

I love you he says

And turns around

To spat on that love

Which he'd expressed

Only moments before

Walking out the door.

He lies and tells her

That the woman

Lying in his arms

Means nothing

Though she's been his lover

For longer that he's

Loved her.

She spits in his face

And calls him a liar

Only to be met

With the palm of his hand.

June 9th, 2009

Author's Note

I wrote two versions of this....I want to know which writing style is better. So please tell me which one! :) Its not quite finished...

Reviews

[visions of doom]

a very very powerful poem but i'll have nightmares about this one , a man who hits a woman is no man at all . you ask us to choose one version or the other , both are uniquely horrific in the story they tell . please please , never allow yourself to become a punching bag for any man . the very thought turns my stomach .
i can't choose one version more than the other princess . both have brought tears to my eyes , very well written but i pray you never have to write another like it .