Only In Dreams Can I Find Happiness

Only in dreams can I find happiness
Where my dark soul finds solace in your eyes.
Only my dreams can end my loneliness
When I'm with you, forever by your side.
In our own world's tranquil serenity,
Inside each others dreams, we are complete.
We are made whole all through eternity,
Never to feel the pain of love's defeat.
Inside these dreams, I know I can escape
From the stark reality of my life
That's doomed forever to a lonely fate
Full of nothing but pain and endless strife;
But in my dreams, I find comfort with you
In an Eden I built only for two.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

"But in my dreams, I find comfort with you in an Eden I built only for two."

Reviews

[GridLok]

Ah, sweet yearning for love's embrace! You display an awareness of rhythm and rhyme that successfully evokes the intensity of romantic love. Consider the phrasing that occurs if your punctuation is different; e.g.
"Only in dreams can I find happiness
Where my dark soul finds solace in your eyes.
Only (my) dreams can end [my] loneliness.
When I'm with you, forever by your side,
In our own world's tranquil serenity,
Inside each others dreams, we are complete."

Note: I have bracketed "my" because I think it needs reconsidering; Either delete the () bracketed "my" or, replace the [] bracketed "my" with "the".

Hope the suggestions assist.

[RedInk524]

Sounds like something i would write for my girl.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

May the dreams hold you always with your lover...... Nice work

[Fragilebrokendreams]

I always like to go there in my little cabin. Its so peaceful and kind.. Adore this poem.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I know this dream place and it never hurts to go there.......beautiful words!

[Lily Mae]

An Eden built only for two is a lovely thought.. You've created another beauty with this,,, :) xx

[Nishant Gupta]

good one see mine too "QUEST OF LIFE".