The Great Writer.

The boy stood on the edge,

he thought of his father,

his wise sayings,

his wise thoughts.

This boy, who became a man,

thought, and wrote.

This boy became,

a great writer.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[DaughterNature]

I feel like this poem really wants to go somewhere! My first thought is that there are some unnecessary commas in it, which make it a little awkward to read. My second recommendation would be to play around with line lengths and line endings. A line and a phrase don't have to end concurrently. Try breaking phrases across lines to increase tension and a sense of forward momentum.