Nightlife

I stare into her piercing blue eyes, glowing like neon ‘open’ signs 

I tell her she’s beautiful, the only one to ever shine so bright 

She calls me a silly liar and tugs at my belt a little, her gaze locked in mine

She sits in my lap, kissing my neck, telling a few lies

I long for her flesh, bronze, yet gold in this light

We go on to mess around a little, for a long while,  

Then I tell her I’ll see her tomorrow, and put a few bucks or so ‘round her thigh

And Feeling a little like Bukowski, I show myself back into the night,

Disgusted and high 

Reviews

[poetdoug]

"I stare into her piercing blue eyes; glowing like neon OPEN signs
I tell her she's beautiful, the only one to ever shine so bright." What a clever way to describe this "Nightlife" experience---and not miss a beat! Then your short and sweet ending 'Disgusted and high".
Great muse my friend!

[A.J.]

haha thank you! its one of those few that even the author can sit back and smirk at.. I enjoy it myself, as short and sweet as it is.

[Meliss@k]

The poem started off so beautifully, the imagery was wonderful. I could hear the tugging of the belt and could see you both staring into each others eyes. I was drawn I. From the start but was very surprised to find out that this poem wasn't like the others, "then they lived happily ever after"... Although it was sad that the lovers were just a man and a prostitute, and although the male character was left "disgusted and high", this poem was oddly enough a breath of fresh air. It was down to earth and I think that what I liked so much about it.
Great write.

[Meliss@k]

Sorry about all of the spelling errors, my T-9 auto correct sucks

[A.J.]

haha yeah, i found it odd too.. its definitely not characteristic of my writing style... yet. i was almost hesitant to post it due to the risk of offending or angering a mob of women.. but then again, nothing great has ever been done without angry women. lol!

[Meliss@k]

Yeah, that's what Rosa Parks thinks too I'm sure ;)