Opening Line

Opening Line: "You never learn." He sounded amused. "Not yet," I said as I took aim."

"You never learn." He sounded amused.

     "Not yet," I said as I took aim.

     He rolled his bloodshot eyes at my determination. My fifth try. Bang! Miss. He laughed, big and hearty. "Hell, I'm just gon sit here wit my beer and relax cuz you got no shot. Wih yur aim, it's a wonder how you get yer piss in the-"

     Between the eyes.

     "You forgot you taught me how to hustle, Pa." I picked up my gun, thinking about how over-confident he was, 'til his dying redneck breath.

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[Marie]

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