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Where the wild one flows,

and the river is wide,

I stand all over alone

waitin' on this salty tide.

She says it's my time,

Says she can't regret.

She knows it's my line

Be awhile to forget.

Stands in the river,

Her bare feet are wet.

So cold, she starts to quiver

where wind and skin have met.

She says it's my time,

Says she can't ever regret.

She knows it's all a line

takes too long to forget.

White on the mirror

Sweet tinkles in glass

She unleashed the fever

and then it kicked my a*s

She says it's my time,

Says she can't ever regret

She knows it's all my line

She just won't ever forget.

While I stand and watch

my thoughts flow away.

I ponder a red pain splotch

turns the night into the day.

My heart is dried up

no more redness there.

So much I tried hard to stop

she laid my soul out bare.

She says it's all time

all in life she regrets

it was lost in that white line

Begs me, please, please forget.

She says it's my time,

says she can't ever regret.

She knows it's all my line,

She knows I can not forget.

She knows it's my time

addiction, regret.

She had to have that next line,

just, just, just to forget.

Reviews

[Andrew N. Farrens]

Those white lines have more than a few of my friends......
Great poem. Wonderfully written.
100/100

[Cerise]

Awww...soooo touching....fantastically written..:D

[Stanley Wilson]

great work mark!! loved it deep and emotive sometimes we cant beat the addiction.

[lee von cleef]

Plenty of cadence ,Did I get the end right now shes doing the coke?

[Mark]

Yes, I suppose it's about how sometimes people simply can not break free from addiction. Even when they realize what they are doing to someone, or ones, they love.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes this is evokative but repetative to the extent is causes switch off. It needs some crafting but has the potential to be really good.

[Mark]

John, I can always count on your honest opinion and it is always welcome. Thanks

[Mockingbird]

for me it evokes regret and sadness. like something that can't be repaired and will remain broken. excellent poem.

[Mark]

Thank you all my friends for your generous praise! :)

[Mia]

"She knows it's my time
addiction, regret.
She had to have that next line,
just, just, just to forget."
Wow Mark you have really out done yourself this time! This is incredible and the ending is so powerful.