from the top side

On crumbling rock sitting

disinterested in the question of a fall

curious what the water would feel like

going from here, to there.

Despair. A place of balance with wind in your face

where you must struggle to plunge,

eyes wet with sting

a heart enlarged and seeping

NO, for another passing

another sun, another moon

jagged winged Pain with the crooked neck 

and stubble head

is disappointed.

Author's Note

I've been drinking. take it for what it's worth, I know, not much LOL.

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

It's sad and dark. Sometimes we have to go there to think, to feel the things we push down and to process. We stand on many precipices and sometimes we force ourselves to look down. And we hope with the next sunrise we'll have the strength to look up instead.

[lee von cleef]

I think of a Esher painting.... M C

[Angi]

This was full of sadness and an ongoing struggle to stay contained. When I write while drinking, I never know what I am going to get. Drink peels the edges of scabs, ya know. Angi~

[Mark]

A very wise observation. I'd never thought of it that way, but that's an excellent way to describe what happens sometimes when I drink.

[Angi]

I think I have always known that. I used to watch my dad pick at his scabs. Be well, Mark. Angi~

[Mark]

Thank you Angi, mostly I am well. I rarely drink anymore. It doesn't go well with semi-trucks and interstates, so once a month or so when I am going to be sleeping somewhere other than the truck, I'll have a few.

[Angi]

Mark, I didn't know you were a trucker! Look at my featured piece. 'The truckers lament' I dedicated it to my trucker brother. I dedicate it to you, too! PS: Havin' a few is something I understand!

[Mark]

I will go look now, Thank you Angi!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoy the drinking poetry. Lately I can afford some good drink. Poetry is coming alive again. I believe hard to see the real world with eyes blinded by liars. Disappointment is easy to write. When the old mind get free from old dusty memories. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Mark]

Thank you Coyote, have a good drink for me next time you're at it. :) (BTW I'm on Hwy 75/69 headed north this time LOL)

[Baby Ricochet]

The feel of the poem is sad. It's a good poem

[Mark]

Thanks my friend.

[redflutterby]

Its not advisable for me to write drunk...it isnt going to be pretty. Lol..

I get a feeling of sad desperation out of this one. Someone who needs to numb their pain but isn't succeeding.

[quinfinn]

not too shabby for a beverage induced write! i do that all the time, it loosens the muse.....very nice !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sounds like someone stuck in a hard place and contemplating their own drowning, metaphorical or not. It has pathos and breached emotion. I think we write in a different mode with alcohol involved and sometimes it frees those emotions and liberates our pens.