Another Night

Another word, another sight,

 another night caught me breathing.

I wish I could see the stars,

hear their song to me.

Your clouds wall them out

How they can be so sharp I don't know but

they know where to make me bleed,

Like you.

The Moon comes through

I see her tears

and answer.

Venus comes with Mars

bright and dull prayers

 through the wall.

Why would I? 

chances like that

are  dandelions thrown,

expecting to hit the stars.

A hole opens around the moon 

I see them twinkling, laughing

Asking me why I would bother.

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Your knowledge shines through, nicely paced is this poem.

[Mockingbird]

the imagery is somewhat dismal. sounds cynical and jaded. i like it.

[Mark]

Yes, I suppose forty years of failed love have made me a bit cynical and jaded! thanks for reading Mb :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Catchy poem Mark :)

Its way difficult to write such a poem where you need to think deep inside and understand how it feels :)

Lines which are Catchy

A hole opens around the moon
I see them twinkling, laughing
Asking me why I would bother.

Cheers!
Singh :)

[Mark]

Thanks

[Vikrantsingh]

;)

[ríða andlit]

Sitting like the devil's halo is a red ring around the moon. It breathes and grows and stains the glowing orb but, your keen observations allow you to catch it before it consumes you.

Beautifully written, fantastic metaphors. You've got this.

[Mark]

Thanks

[s y e]

"Why would I?
chances like that
are dandelions thrown,
expecting to hit the stars."

Woah! I loved this stanza! It was written to perfection, ha! Loved it.

~ Noodle.

[quinfinn]

"why would i?
chances like that
are dandelions thrown,
expecting to hit the stars."
utterly brilliant!

[Baby Ricochet]

The last stanza is golden. I liked this one very much. Great work sir.

[Mark]

Glad you liked BR

[Nia Hope]

Very pretty I like this

[Mark]

Thanks

[Frieda P]

I like this one, it's like a sigh of exasperation on your page, I understand where this is coming from, sometimes it feels as though even the stars are against us. Love the line...

chances like that
are dandelions thrown,
expecting to hit the stars.

Exactly, so does feel that way some days....nice one Mark!

[Mark]

Thank you Frieda, means a lot coming from you. :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A piercing look into mystery and defense really, well done, great read.

[Mark]

Thank you, I'm gladl you read and found merit Thomas