Stay here

I was thinking, I really hate endings. I want to always stay in the beginning.

Your voice lit up my spine, glowing

I felt you and I, and it looked so never ending

you stood by, and I just flew by...

Couldn't we just stay in the beginning?

where the end is still an infinity

Couldn't we just pull a circle 

round us here, and make hills

we could forever climb?

Can't the path always stay new?

while the pine needles turned to rust

Why does it always happen

the wall, the pain, the dust.

I wished and washed the sky away

pulling down blackness, outlining you

I fall in the dust every day

wanting to know, to know, 

why beginnings always go.

I would hold you harder

if the time would only give up its sin

I would pray if it mattered

I wouldn't choose, I wouldn't lose

again.

I wished and washed the sky away

outlined in black; now you are void

I inhale your dust every day

I hardly remember you, us, the joy.

please, put back on those shoes

hold my hand so we can stand

and breath this air til it's new

let us start again, at the beginning.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

if only, you would remain forever young at the same time. i can't tell you how many times i have had these thoughts but, i thank you for putting them into words, whereas i could not. this is superb!

[Mark]

wow, thank you quin!

[Saumya]

oh, that was realllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllly wonderful.....!!!!!!!
i really wish,that our life has no ending, to the wonderful feelings, which
greatly exist in the begining.....!!!!
i must say
"this was a really wonderful work"
loved it a lot"..!!!!

keep writing and rocking,
good luck,
saumya

[Mark]

Thank you :)

[Saumya]

highly welcomed...!!!
:)

[Vikrantsingh]

Great Write :)
Loved it Mark ;)

Have to leave from this page to read more work... Or else I would stay here ;)

Thanks for such a wonderful poem :)
Singh :)

[Mark]

heeeheee thank you Singh

[Vikrantsingh]

Welcome :)

[s y e]

Does it really have to end?!

I thought this was a great piece, so much emotion and honesty here. It's beautiful. Beginnings are the best. I think, personally, we all have a lot to learn and we will make mistakes 'cause it's in our nature. Even as we get older we still learn new things, we have so many memories to keep and to share.

This was amazing, I loved it. It doesn't have to end...

~ Noodle.

[Archangel Gabriel]

A beautifully sad poem reminiscing over the shiny new part of a relationship. The expression you use allows the emotion to be palpable.

[QuietlyCrash]

I adore the feeling of longing I get from this piece. Every line is so full of emotion and it's beautiful. Beginnings are the best parts. There are still mistakes to be made, things to learn, and memories to create. Ending is just the process of picking up the pieces from those mistakes and tucking all the memories away. This is a great write thanks for sharing! :)
-Riley

[Mark]

Thank you for the thoughtful review. i'm glad I could move you.

[Nia Hope]

I really like this great job!

[Mark]

Thanks! I"m glad you liked. :)

[redflutterby]

Wow..so much here to touch a heart. Can't we start anew? Life happens...we work and struggle losing the freshness of love. Too go back to those days where things were simple and heady would be ideal. Beautiful poem Mark.. ;-)

[Mark]

thanks Red!!!! :)

[Angi]

Beginnings are so easy and carefree. The little distractions are overlooked. Full of regret and the wish for a time machine! Angi~

[Mark]

LOL ya, I was gonna write that into the poem.. time machine.. but it just didn't fit anywhere :P

[Angi]

I have been trying to fit that in somewhere, too!

[Mark]

Maybe if we collaborate?

"how long must you work on that infernal thing?"

[Angi]

Ha! I actually found an old poem from years ago that had it in there. It was about Def Leppard...you don't want to know.

[Mark]

rofl I love Def Leppard! they are ALL over my music list

[Angi]

There was a line somthing like, 'My hair will be big, when I go to their next gig....' Truly horrible. But, I love that band, too!