A Morning Haiku

All these senryus going around, I thought I'd get in on the fun. Saw this sight and was inspired, somewhere in Ohio on Route 30 near the Indiana border.

Gray- white mists hover

Sun tries in vain to touch Earth

Clouds got to her first.

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice Haiku

[Mark]

Thanks BR

[Emerald Seas]

An enlightening poetic view! I envision a heavy fog that will not lift or burn off.

[Mark]

I was driving a little after dawn. In some hills the sky was covered with clouds that were low enough to create mists and I could see streaks of white where the Sun was trying to come through.

[Archangel Gabriel]

An interestingly observed weather feature Mark. Did you aim to use 'touch' twice?

[Mark]

not really, it just happened and I didn't read my work before posting. thanks Gab ;)

[eglantine]

I like it, except for the repetition of "touch" Perhaps, "Gray and white kneel down"???

[Mark]

we think alike sometimes. I was lazily contemplating editing out the first 'touch'. I'll come up with something. Thanks for the prod e :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Darned weather! nice sharp senyru Mark.

[Mark]

Thanks LOL

[Robbie~xoxo~]

What a nice imagery of the sun!... yearning to touch the earth. A sweet Senryu!

[Mark]

Thanks Robbie but since it's about Nature, it's called Haiku.

[Jack...]

Very nice Mark. You did a great job with this.

[Mark]

Thanks Jack :)